No titles, please -------------------------------------------
I know I'm dumb and confusing,
Silly and amusing,
Don't mind me it's just your brain I'm abusing.
Fucked up and witty,
With the heart of a lion and eyes of conformity.
Sexy and smart,
With a burned soul and a shredded heart.
You wanna try my game ?
Witness my shame or destroy my fairytale fame ?
No....you wanna watch me cry in pain and plead once again.
Speak a prayer and Scream.... Amen.
If I could give some advice for you from me, it would simply be...
With a voice unheard you can't continue to dream,
With no free will of mind you can't be free.
Let all of that go, just let yourself be with me.
and if I could ask it of you , no fucking titles please.
you have a tendency to write in a so "you rhyme structure" that I am becomming familiar with and I like BUT then you throw these 3 line rhymes in which I am not big on-it just seems like ...well it makes your writing not as serious, yeah it takes away credibility and overall tone of the piece. Hi BTW where ya been ? How Was the show? and YES my friend does live in phoenix
ha, makes me smile to read it...you must be quite the individual, let me tell you...this piece is a little different from your other writings, so if only in that I appreciate you writing it...so interesting, though, that this work you're posting was written all in the past, wish I could dig up old things like this I had written long ago...anyways as for your actual poem, i really like it, the beginning and end were the best parts, i really enjoyed this, hope to read more from your 'past'...good job