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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 964
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 815



    Description:
       Written in 1994.



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    I know I'm dumb and confusing,
    Silly and amusing,
    Don't mind me it's just your brain I'm abusing.
    Fucked up and witty,
    With the heart of a lion and eyes of conformity.
    Sexy and smart,
    With a burned soul and a shredded heart.
    You wanna try my game ?
    Witness my shame or destroy my fairytale fame ?
    No....you wanna watch me cry in pain and plead once again.
    Speak a prayer and Scream.... Amen.
    If I could give some advice for you from me, it would simply be...
    With a voice unheard you can't continue to dream,
    With no free will of mind you can't be free.
    Let all of that go, just let yourself be with me.
    and if I could ask it of you , no fucking titles please.




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      i like this poem cuz it comes straight out with saying dont call me what im not... and if im wrong im sorry on 16 triple c's at the moment
    | Posted on 2005-07-25 00:00:00 | by slntfirflm | [ Reply to This ]
      you have a tendency to write in a so "you rhyme structure" that I am becomming familiar with and I like BUT then you throw these 3 line rhymes in which I am not big on-it just seems like ...well it makes your writing not as serious, yeah it takes away credibility and overall tone of the piece. Hi BTW where ya been ? How Was the show? and YES my friend does live in phoenix
    | Posted on 2005-05-19 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      ha, makes me smile to read it...you must be quite the individual, let me tell you...this piece is a little different from your other writings, so if only in that I appreciate you writing it...so interesting, though, that this work you're posting was written all in the past, wish I could dig up old things like this I had written long ago...anyways as for your actual poem, i really like it, the beginning and end were the best parts, i really enjoyed this, hope to read more from your 'past'...good job

    tony
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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