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    dots Submission Name: Silently screamingdots
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    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 68
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 743
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 425



    Description:
       i was venting over a fight my parents had and i was in the middle again so yea plz juss comment and tell me what you think thats all i'm asking...


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    dotsSilently screamingdots
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    I am awake
    I am asleep
    I need help
    Repeat:
    this cut is to deep to heal
    can't you hear me scream
    or see me cry
    or feel my pain
    the blood has dripped way to long..
    my lungs are empty
    my bodys numb
    the slilent scream has been going on way to long
    for it's time to stop dreaming and you to start seeing
    that i'm screaming..




    Submitted on 2005-04-03 20:00:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a very well written poem, it seems that you have a hard family life and I am sorry to see that - it's hard to grow up with 2 parents that fight! I ended up in foster care when I was 14 so I know the pain. Maybe you need to go to family counseling???
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      good poem i really liked it it had good wording a lil short but its ok i look forward to more poems of yours good work-tom
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by tom111111111111 | [ Reply to This ]
      Great job capturing the moment and expressing your
    frustration. Sometimes it helps just to get it out.
    I pray that things get better with your parents.
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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