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    dots Submission Name: please read-my reflectiondots
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    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/What you did
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    Description:
       to my father
    from your daughter
    thanks for nothing
    plz comment


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    dotsplease read-my reflectiondots
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    Looking into the mirror
    All i can see is a reflection of you
    In a image of me,
    And it hurts to hate you so much but when i look into the glass
    I can see you looking back at me
    With your eyes that only see yourself
    and lips that only speak lies
    I hate being like you in every possible way
    I regret being yours every single day
    In my mind you are nothing
    And i can see your nothingness live inside of me
    And i pray not to be like you
    and make the same mastakes you do,
    But no matter how hard i try there
    will always be a part of you left to lie to me
    Because a part of you will always be inside of me...




    Submitted on 2005-04-03 21:27:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It is such an interesting concept you have captured here. The inner turmoil between your conflict with your dad, but at the same time becoming like him in appearance. But as you are looking into the reflection, are you seeing eyes that see yourself, because you are also beginning to become like him? Sometimes the best you can do in this world is see the mistakes your parents make and make sure you dont make them yourself.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Linksquest | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem makes me think that you have a lot of inner pain due to your dad... but you don't have to be like him you know! You are you, you are an individual and you don't have to live your life making the same mistakes he made! I'm sorry you have this feeling towards your dad but I do understand.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, it appears that you hate your dad...lol...me and my mouth...i'm sorry...i don't know one person who doesn't have a dad like that...my step dad lies about the drugs he does and drove us into bankrupcy...if you can see the things he tends to ignore, then you have something of your own and don't take that for granted.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]


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