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    dots Submission Name: Death is not a feardots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsDeath is not a feardots
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    Death is not a new thought to me.
    Days I feel homicidal
    Days I feel suicidal
    And there days I can be the sweetest guy around...

    Death is not a new thought to me.
    Death does not scare me
    Neither does this knife going into my wrist
    I'm to drug up
    To feel the knife go into my wrist
    So this means I cut faster and deeper so I feel it.
    Now the pain washes away with the blood when it goes down the drain.

    Death is not a new thought to me
    The hate and despair is still in me.
    The rope hanging from my closet doesn't scare me.
    Why not put my head into the hole.
    And fall off the chair so dad finds me with the face of despair and loneliness.


    Death is not a new thought to me
    You can put me on the drugs you want
    But the thought of death will not go away.
    Death is my shadow.
    It's going to be there like the breaking of dawn and the rising of the moon at night.

    Death is not a new thought to me
    I wish I could see there faces when they see me when Iím dead.
    So this is my letter to all that know me.
    This is my farewell to the world I hate so much.




    Submitted on 2005-04-03 22:56:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was really sad.but it sounds like your tryin to reach out for help.like death is in your shadow as you put it but you dont want it there so yo turn to drugs and drinking to make all the loneliness disapear.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the poem but don't hate the world it didn't do any thing to you(that was ment to be a joke sorry if it made you mad),But when I first Read"Death does is not a new thought to me" it didn't seem right and I thought it sounded wrong but after reading it a few times it was better, some day we all feel homicidal
    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like the line it's like the breaking of dawn and the rising of the moon at night, thats a really good line and i can understand the poem perfectly, i love it
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by silentpoison | [ Reply to This ]
      You can't die! I like your poems WAY too much!
    Great write! Keep working and reworking! There is always room for improvement (though not a lot of room here...see how much i like it?)
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Alyra | [ Reply to This ]
      wow good nice size good wording it seemmed that you were very very suisidal! i really hope your not cuz i really like your poems they re very good this one is excellent very good work-tom
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by tom111111111111 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my gosh, you remind me of how I feel too; that's scary! I too have cut my wrist, and have felt suicidal... it's a far too common phenomenon.
    Good poem, I like it.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by psycho_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, you finally put things into words the way i can't...i've done that to and ended up lying onthe floor for about two hours...cause no one came home that night...but neways...this was really amazing, i love the way you write, keep doin it.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this poem has no flow because all the stanzas differ however that can be improved easily... of course you have to mold it to fit your ideas... good write but reforming it could make it better.
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by dark-red-pain | [ Reply to This ]
      I love this...I really do. I love the way the 'flow' is constant at time and inconstant in others. It makes you read it more than once.
    Good work
    I can relate
    | Posted on 2005-04-03 00:00:00 | by _Belladonna_ | [ Reply to This ]


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