Hello Ladies.....
before this starts
I want you all to realize one thing about me
I've never had luck with you...
so please.....be nice....and I'll be gentle....
*Tell me why it gotta be this way
I try to find someone faithful but they won't stay
maybe it's because guys have better cars
or I always pick up bitches hanging behind bars*
(25 cent bitches.....)
I knew this girl...lets just call her Jane
she smelled like shit and her face was plain
not a grain of trust I gave to her
and for good reason too, a good reason for sure
you see.....
she fucked on me one day,
with this druggie kid from around the way
and it didn't take me long to find out
she still had nutstains all around her mouth
but I loved her.....or so I thought
I fought with the plot but I finally got caught
and I took her arm and let her out the door
kicked her in the ass and called her a whore.
It didn't work out...needless to say
but for the plain jane there's a price to pay.
a lot of guys want a girl who's down to fuck
but even fuckin gay guys like a girl who can suck
and that's what she did
so I kicked her out kid
she's just lucky that I didn't open up her lid
It seems I tried to explain but all my words went missing
and her nut stained mouth was the one I was kissing.....uh
*Tell me why it gotta be this way
I try to find someone faithful but they won't stay
maybe it's because guys have better cars
or I always pick up bitches hanging behind bar*
(25 cent bitches.....)
hmm, I don't know if I should be a little upset or kinda amazed. It was a good poem, I think, correct me if I'm wrong, that the point was you really liked thid girl, maybe even loved her, and she cheated on you. and i think the name calling came from anger b/c she had cheated on you. you do have a talent and i am not going to tell you that the way you expressed your anger or w/e it was is wrong. i hope someday you'll find a girl who's gentle with you and won't cheat on you. good luck...peace out
Boy wuts up with the dirrtyyy disrespect for women . . Guess thats y you searching for some "Faithful" chick! It's really sad that you witing about women in such a demeaning way coz u r actually really talented. I honestly challenge you to write some kinda passion poem where u actually speaking about a lady and her nice body (try not using the word "[censored]"). I must give u sum credit though - the title (although i don't like it much) was the reason why i read the poem... p.s i hope u find some smart ass chick who will work you in such a way that you stop with the nasty girl-name-calling. Nadia*
Maybee for a angry rapper this would work. However I do not consider it much in the way of poetry. Sure you have some rhythem and rhyming in it but I find disrespecting a woman distasteful and unfortunatly it ruined me of this piece. You do have talent, perhaps if you channeled it to a more mainstream venue of poetry I would appreciate your talent more. BUT IT ISNT ABOUT ME IS IT? YOu feel free to write as you like. This is only my views and I am not the sharpest tool in the shed. your friend Ben
Submission Name: 25 Cent Bitches
good luck...peace out