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Scatterings of the Wind


Author: Brownsdelight
ASL Info:    25/F/NUEVO MEXICO
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Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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As long as Faith remains, everything else can be restored.........


Scatterings of the Wind



Arm extended I gazed upon my hand
Watching the slow trickling of sand.
Grain after grain being sifted in the wind
Each representing a memory I once lived.

Love…
Found its way to the East.

Passion…
Fluttered along to the West.

Hope…
Swirled along in a Northward direction.

Trust…
Took flight and was spread all through the South.

I felt the winds calm to a gentle breeze
Gazed down at my cupped hand and stared in disbelief.
There lying gingerly was one single solitary grain.
Though the winds of Fate were strong, Faith still remained.




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  I think i might categorize more as "spiritual crisis (resolved)"...but then that's just me.

Eh...potatoe...potato...

I have always held the idea of wind bringing change/inspiration/renewal in poetry. Must have been that one ode by that one weepy guy i like so much.

I like that you coupled love, passion, hope and trust with your winds of change. You could have just as easily chosen such forces as lust or all-consuming passion...or, well...the other way around. You know what i mean.

I myself would have an innate to approach this idea negatively. Just my mein i guess.

Anyhow, spiritual crisis is a major theme in my own work, so i can really relate with this one.

enjoyable read,
see you around,
kc
| Posted on 2006-01-31 00:00:00 | by twacky | [ Reply to This ]
  a beautiful write
your poems are truly beautiful
you definately are gifted

and yes of course i will pray for you and your family
and thank you for praying for mine
the power of prayer is so powerful
something so simple yet so powerful

God Bless You Too
Ron
| Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  This was a very good well written metaphor poem about faith, yes one grain of faith is a tsunmai against the evil of this world and the next.

Excellent write
| Posted on 2005-05-13 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem was very strong and meaningful. Of all the things that were scattered away faith remained. That's sort of how life is. If you lose your faith you have lost everything. Great poem. Don't listen to that idiot baby tyrone what does he know about a great poem.
| Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by SmoothePapa | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh hell naw! That is some prettyful stuff there. This is the best one I have read of yours hands down. You just went the whole nine with this one. I'm sure the women who read this can appreciate it because it tells a tale of the strength that women have after all of our BS. I loved it...As long as you got faith there is still another chance...


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| Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
  Ahhh now wonder you have so many comments here...This is a really nice write...Though im not known for my lingering faith ..this poem held me in til the end anyway ...Beautiful ...Praise Praise Praise
| Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
  The entire poem was breath taking..but I got to the end and just said; "Wow, this is really good". That last line just grabbed at me. This tops the chart. I hope to read more like this from you.

~Sandra
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
  Indeed a beautiful write here, T. So easy and relaxing to read and just let your mind drift away. I dont think I would change a single word of it. It flows so gently, like a soft summer breeze. And through everything, there is Faith, never leaving our side.
Still remaining. Bravo to you and thanks you for this soft, gentle piece.
Carol
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
  You sure won't get much constructive criticism for this, only praise. Very original, and really interesting and easy on the eye and on the mind. Five Stars! Be happy
Graeme
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
  Such nice imagery could not be critisised in any way. But one really got to me about this piece, did you have the sand in your hand to start with? There is nothing to suggest you did or you didn't. As I read through the first stanza, I thought about gazing into a hand, as you do, and then this imagery of sand came from nowhere. At first I thought it was reference to time passing, but then as the write progressed I saw otherwise.

Just a little thing but I thought I'd be different from the rest of the comments. Otherwise, as I've said, such nice imagery make for a nice read, nice work.
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  This was very nice. Made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside, because yes, faith remains after all seems scattered. The faith that everything that has been scattered returning by the winds... Very well done.
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  Well this was a different format for you. You must have really been musing at the time.

I love this though. It flowed so eligantly. Girl, why you trying to act like you got skillz! LMFAO You know I'm gonna hate! Lol

No honestly babes, this was really sweet!

Li Li
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
  wow i like the direction metaphores they are very unique and they fit very well. the form works with this because u give the reader time to reflect on what is written nicely done
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by winged_writer_robyn | [ Reply to This ]
  aw T- what a hopeful poem. it was just beautiful! one with a moral. no matter what happens and how badly our life is torn apart, it will all be ok if we keep faith in our grasp...lovely!
-Nikki
| Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by stolie77 | [ Reply to This ]


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