Description: I can't take full credit for this one Bonnie a.k.a Krazy helped me on this one
Call me Bane -------------------------------------------
Bed full of red with a single black bud
Sorrowful black blossom a child called Bane
A hole of darkness in a sea of blood
Coated with dew from a dark nightly rain
The pain he has is no ones but his own
With the darkness surrounding he gives in
Broken and forgotten he stands alone
He's learned from life that he will never win
The red blooms being picked for Valentines
With a burst of glory they help her swoon
He won't be handed out with the Be Mine's
His life will be dark, the end will be soon
His heart has been lifted she is the one
He took me to her whose heart he has won
Mmmmm, blood...hehehe, oh oops, hidden meaning not supposed to be said out loud. WOOPS, "Whoops? My insurance does not cover PMS!" *Giggles* Sorry! I had to put it. I don't think I should be commenting on anything right now...I will probably come back and re-comment if you would like, if not, cool.
Well I just reread, and this is really good. I love it when you and Bon deside to write something together, you both have a wonderful gift and when you put them together it's just well im not sure how to describe it. Good job.
this is a really hard thing to comment on but there are no doubts that it's really good. i'm always jealous when you two get those insane minds together to come up with stuff. it always ends up like, perfect.
This is cool, I'm not really up to commenting, but I'll do it when I do. I just wanted to let you know this is really good,the flow and all. I'll come back to this.
good..i must say very good, Nice use of words in this one...I like how you used the word swoon...Never really found the right place to put that word..but you did and your friend of couse did a great job...Nice work
Submission Name: Call me Bane
