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    dots Submission Name: Our own powerdots
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    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 227
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 978
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1450



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       Just trying to shake a different snow glob


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    dotsOur own powerdots
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    Together we can look up at the heavenly stars and smile,
    For we know that forever is a promise,
    That we have chosen to abide by,
    And by knowing the words of each otherís breathe,
    Like the back of our palms,
    We can confine in each other,
    Breaking the rules with the touch of our hearts,
    Smothering the open sea,
    With just a handful of glances shared by us,
    Finally understanding the world that we stand on each day,
    Forgiving the ones who by not of choice,
    But by fault have let us down,
    Carefully placing hands in hand,
    Walking side but not by side,
    Next to each other,
    Replacing beauty with roses,
    Colors so great and a many,
    Sorrow facing sorrow,
    And fighting pain with fingertips,
    Setting down the carvers tool,
    For we have by Godís will found our place in life,
    Creating a boundary capable of crossing,
    And swearing on the stone chapel,
    That we shall love and cherish each other
    For better or for worse,
    In sickness and or in heath,
    And then strolling down a lane of bitter honey,
    That crosses our lips,
    But not to have shaken or disturbed,
    But to awaken the senses that inside of us,
    Posses we do so,
    And let fearful come across weak,
    And forever share our own power.

    ©2005 Devon Sullivan





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      woah i really like this one my cousin is getting married and i was wondering if i could read it to everyone :) i will tell them its by u n e way ill ttyl bye bye p.s what does it mean when somone is stalking you?? (on Eliteskills i mean )
    | Posted on 2005-05-09 00:00:00 | by kLaDeeDa | [ Reply to This ]
      i totally agree with pooky this is a great write. this poem shows deap emotion and imagery to freedom and distinguished power. this write make me think about being on top of the world when the world is on top of me.
    Great write
    James
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      HOLY SHIT DEV! I heart this...your best BEST BEST by far. Even though there was a reference to God I didn't mind(you know my beliefs are diff) This was so deep and perseptive and I think this is your talent, I told you you have some and that it would come out. Well chic this happend to be what it looks like...this is it..IT. You are an amasing writer and this shows that I was right about the potential I wouldn't stop believing you have. You have it and it's all right up there..never quit believing in yourself because i sure as hell won't...never...you'll make it on writes like this...like a bed of roses to catch you when you fall...this will be your roses and so many other writes to come after. I applaud you...so many never find their roses.

    Blessed Be!
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Sarah Leger | [ Reply to This ]


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