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    dots Submission Name: Eye Closed my mind'z "I"dots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 232
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 572
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 581



    Description:
       This is my second on-line attempt at a poem within a poem and then SUM....so for any & ALL their *there is a message ; > }

    Love, Peace, Joy

    ps: read the centralized words down & that'z the OTHER...he he he
    Love, Peace, Joy and a great "1" 2 All....epiphany


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    dotsEye Closed my mind'z "I"dots
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    Eye closed my mind'z
    "I"
    Aye, till self was but
    A
    Color
    swirling red, green, blue
    All
    combined; he, me and
    You
    the timeless
    Rock...
    All
    Rock &
    Roll...
    not just a
    Role...
    BEING/?>.,!
    Right (like OK!)
    Write (like mad?)
    Right (like left...)




    Submitted on 2005-04-04 21:36:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm oh-kay, u'r oh-kay...

    This is terrific! I love the way you play with words and punctuation in this. Am making it a fave... :-)
    | Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      I, A, All you rock roll write, right?


    Yes, you go girl.

    A good riddle for delightful insight.
    More insight and not just a comment...
    | Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm..."A 7 Nation Army" ' couldn't hold me back...'...LOVE, PEACE,JOY! 2 myself or "A Room W/A View"...

    You go girl!

    Don't just read what it says but what "IT" sayz...
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a daring experiment of extremes, even freestyle, Tiffany and won't be understood in just a fast reading it will take a few to half-way comprehend what you are doing here but I got time and will mediate then fairly review this unique submission of poetry.
    `always with love reading poety, Cheryl
    | Posted on 2005-04-04 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]


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