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    dots Submission Name: Stereotypes even in Simplicitydots
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    Author: Sebby
    ASL Info:    14/Male/Timbaktu
    Elite Ratio:    6.2 - 67/78/29
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This I got from an elusive inspiration that was unluckily lurking around in my classroom one day when the teacher talked about the themes present in the novel, "To Kill a Mockingbird". And hey presto, or voila, or there you go, or wadeva...here's a poem. This has been difficult to think of, since many poems are also based on stereotypes and this is the freshest idea I can brainstorm for and base the poem on...but bash on if you want.

    Sebby

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    dotsStereotypes even in Simplicitydots
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    Light is holy.
    Water is holy
    Doves are holy.
    They are the signs of God.

    Black is darkness.
    Red is sin.
    Blood is unclean.
    These are the marks of the Devil.

    Priests are infallible.
    Saints never sin.
    Presidents never make mistakes.
    That's what holiness is.

    Albinoes are demons.
    Ravens and crows are messengers of the dead.
    Black cats are silent stalkers...
    Ever heard of superstition?

    Light blinds
    Water drowns
    Doves peck
    Do you get what I mean?

    If priests are all powerful and holy
    Where do the paedophilic cases come from?
    I'm sure saints are infallible people
    That never got angry or ever thought bad of others.
    Presidents don't make mistakes? Ha, that's a good one.
    Ever heard of Bush and the Iraqis?

    Even the colours white and black are stereotyped
    So are the clean and the 'dirty' skinned
    Can't you see both entities can co-exist.
    Good and bad are bound to one.




    Submitted on 2005-04-05 06:45:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Good idea, I geuss you have some decent ideas but you should take more time with this though and write something more sensible, you have holes in your stereotypical writing style. Like this...

    Priests are infallible.
    Saints never sin.
    Presidents never make mistakes.
    That's what holiness is.

    Those statements are obviously all wrong, and said sarcastically I agree with you, except for the last line. You must not have studied much of religion, assuming christianity due to the context of this piece, but holiness is nothing of what you said. Furthermore..

    Light blinds
    Water drowns
    Doves peck
    Do you get what I mean?

    Light brings life, Water Brings Life, Doves are a symbol of Love a purity, assuming you speak of white doves. True, light can blind, but the immoral sins of this worl cause more blindness than light has ever caused. Water has braught death, but without water our own, YOUR own body would not function. This frustrates me that you can think and write so negatively but such obvious blessings apon earth.

    If priests are all powerful and holy
    Where do the paedophilic cases come from?
    I'm sure saints are infallible people
    That never got angry or ever thought bad of others.
    Presidents don't make mistakes? Ha, that's a good one.
    Ever heard of Bush and the Iraqis?

    So you want to crack on priests. Look at the numbers then my friend, how many priests do you know? How many priests in this world have paedophilic cases against them? Look at the ratio, if all you belive is what you see on t.v. then you are a foolish man. The media tells us nothing of the truth, only what will make the most outrage and money, ultimately money is the goal in the mind of the paparazzi. This is also concerning your opinion on the war in Iraq, what do you truly know, perhaps you have been there, is so let me know in that case you would have a true opinion but if not then all you know is what the media wants you to know, and again you will be a foolish man.
    All together the poem was weak, I like the idea's you have but your completely pesimistic as to an outcome, or a positive change. It had poor flow, not enough consistency. I have never really cut down a poem this much, but I feel strongly about this topic, so I spoke my mind. In no way do I want you to be mad I am just talking about the poem. God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]


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