shattered

Author: lynn marsters ASL Info:    20/f/canada Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32 Words: 55

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shattered

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shattered I stumble across the deserted plains seeking a way seeking an answer seeking a beauty I restlessly search unsure and unwise confused and withering away you confidently pause and look back on my remains I know you don't care

Submitted on 2005-04-05 16:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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i am always seeking,and my search is always restlessi am always stumbling,beacuse i am shattered that she dosen't care personally i liked coulda said more but it would never really be enough cool toyysruss

| Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]

This was interesing. But it looked more like a kind of rough draft, and maybe if you experiment with this a little longer you can organize this into something more powerful. nice work!

| Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]

nice write and it is nice to see another canadian writer on the site not to many of us geat title but i think you could do wonders with the thought but i still liked it nice write sandman

| Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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