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Author: lynn marsters
ASL Info:    20/f/canada
Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 49 /61 /32
Words: 55
Class/Type: Misc /Misc
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shattered I stumble
across the deserted plains

seeking a way
seeking an answer
seeking a beauty

I restlessly search
unsure and unwise
confused and withering away

you confidently pause
and look back on my remains
I know you don't care

Submitted on 2005-04-05 16:01:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i am always seeking,and my search is always restlessi am always stumbling,beacuse i am shattered that she dosen't care

personally i liked
coulda said more
but it would never really be enough


| Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
  This was interesing. But it looked more like a kind of rough draft, and maybe if you experiment with this a little longer you can organize this into something more powerful.
nice work!
| Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by marigold | [ Reply to This ]
  nice write and it is nice to see another canadian writer on the site not to many of us
geat title but i think you could do wonders with the thought but i still liked it
nice write
| Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]

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