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    dots Submission Name: my reflectiondots
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    Author: UNunderStood
    ASL Info:    16/f/oh
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 79/87/25
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Description:
       to my dad plz comment to make it better...plz


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    dotsmy reflectiondots
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    Looking into the mirror
    All i can see is a reflection of you
    In a image of me,
    And it hurts to hate you so much but when i look into the glass
    I can see you looking back at me
    With your eyes that only see yourself
    and lips that only speak lies
    I hate being like you in every possible way
    I regret being yours every single day
    In my mind you are nothing
    And i can see your nothingness live inside of me
    And i pray not to be like you
    and make the same mastakes you do,
    But no matter how hard i try there
    will always be a part of you left to lie to me
    Because a part of you will always be inside of me...




    Submitted on 2005-04-05 17:46:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is incredible because it describes how many teenagers feel in this day and age. we don't like what we've become and the choices of our past haunts us and there's no escaping them. nice job.
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by secretdream0 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really really well written I like this alot. I wrote something based off the same thing called can this be is it really me. I can relate to this 100%. I like the way you portrayed this idea. Excellent.
    | Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by EL | [ Reply to This ]


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