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    Author: nwproud
    ASL Info:    27 / vancouver, wa
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 280/243/64
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       hmm, make of it what you will, work was terrible today, I had a headache, she was on my mind, and all sorts of loose ends to tie up...i just want to write, though I dont want to force the words either...dont think I am in this, I do feel this way.


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    habitual breeze reminds me of home,
    a memory stolen, replaced,
    though nothing really fits in,
    the effort still makes me smile.
    No pride from the day to day,
    the will long ago forgotten,
    and as the day continues to expire,
    renewal is stubbornly ignored.
    It used to be the idea
    of knowing she will be waiting,
    now its only the fear,
    and the memory tomorrow will bring.
    Two long years to go,
    locked in a stream of surface value,
    whose to know, if any of me will remain,
    when she finally comes around...
    Though I believe that hope,
    the hope of a better day to come,
    is better left to its own ideas,
    Hope hasnt a thing to do with heart,
    and deep inside me lies a strength,
    it's waiting until the time is right,
    and in all their faces, I can see it now,
    the respect I've always long for
    it's simply a word away,
    a question out of reach,
    a move unprepared for,
    wait, and I will make believers of them all,
    be patient, for she wont come to love me,
    in the end, she'll have known it all along.
    One day. It's coming soon.




    Submitted on 2005-04-05 20:53:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      It's hard to wait so long to see someone again. It'll be a year in august since I've seen amy. And she has 3 more years to go. What sucks is we used to talk a lot but now we dont and I still love her as a best friend. But we talked a month ago and I guess were not even friends. She sees life differently. She puts the past behind her and lives her life moving on. But she moves on and makes new friends while hurting others "ME". It's always nice reading your poems because we have a lot in common.
    | Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say I look foreward to reading your writings, it seems we have much in common. But out of all I have read from you, this is by far the best. I loved your sense of longing, and desperate for her reply, but somehow finding a smile to place on your face. Acceptance, and confidence that all of this will work out in the end. I Admire you for this one, so good. Good luck brother, and you've got two poems on my favorites list now!
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by UnspokenDreamer | [ Reply to This ]
      Tony, you still cease to amaze me with your writing. you are amazing in all sense of the word. I know that it is tough waiting for your time to be up so that you can come home and see her, i know what it is like. I am still waiting for Chris in a sense. I dont know what Hannah is feeling, but i am sure that you are right..the day is coming soon.
    | Posted on 2005-04-05 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]


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