Description: She was dieing to meet all of you, I have told her all about you guys here at Elite Skills.....ooooh I hope you like her,
but what's there not to like?
MY RUBBER LOVER -------------------------------------------
I got a girl.
She's the best thing in my world.
She loves me so,
More than anything I've ever owned.
She never has a bad word to say.
Nor anything good but that’s o.k.
She displays her talents in other ways.
I remember the morning I saw the ad.
She looked so lonely in that box, I felt so bad.
So I went to the address,
I even bought her a dress.
I couldn’t wait to make her my own
and for 28 days we didn’t leave my home.
She came with a lifetime guarantee.
She wouldn’t lose her shape,
and never split on me.
She’s everything I wanted and more.
Never talks back and in bed she's a whore.
She makes me so hot.
And I don’t worry about her smoking my pot.
I love her a lot.
I don’t even care about these sores I got.
She's so great
and she lets me punch her right in the face.
She's my girl and I'm her guy.
Together we're gonna buy KY.
She hangs on every word I say.
Not once has she ever walked away.
She doesn't cook or clean,
she really doesn't eat
or do much of anything.
But my girl I wouldn't trade,
though I always have the option to upgrade.
Sometimes I lock her in the closet,
simply because she just isn’t wanted.
But when I let her out;
Just inflate, and ejaculate it's true.
The box said she'd always feel like new.
I can be rough and pull her hair
or treat her like she’s just not there.
Her creator said she’d last forever.
So far so good
plus my sex life is 100 times better.
I'm going to ask her to marry me.
She's it
she's the girl of my dreams.
I don’t want any other.
and so what if my lover is rubber,
she's my girl
and I absolutely love her.
I read C. Starr's "B.O.B." poem and then saw that it was based from this poem... I thought I'll check it out and now... boy did this make my day interesting. All I can say is have fun with your lover but great arse poem. I love it *thumbs up* LOL, sorry.
funny... i was looking for a love poem, and this is what i got!! well, it's true she'll never run out on you. don't bite her though or she'll deflate on you... thanks for the laugh!
another brilliant write! i like how you mislead your audience. in the beginning i thought you had a daughter, then a girlfriend, then i went through a confused stage but found myself again as the clues reveal your "girl" that pleases you so well. nicely thought out. i would love to cut off the top of your head and see how your brain works lol! one thing though, the rhyme scheme was a little amateur but it works. it would have had a much bigger impact if your creative skills overflowed in your style of rhyme as it did in your clever way of forming the poem. but really good.
I'm confused because I read a poem exactly like this about a month ago. I have to check, but is this a resubmission? If not, it's surprisingly similar to another piece about an artificial "girl". Or is it possible you posted it awhile back on another site? It would be someplace I don't go to anymore. LOL. I'll check and if I figure it out, get back to you or if you know the answer, drop me a line because it's a bugger!
Well, that was somehow really really interesting! I really am not sure whether I have read any of your poems before or not! I think I didn't! But I think after reading this one I'll try to read more of your poems and may be watch out for your posts in the future too!
And now about the poem itself; I think that this is a very funny DIRTY poem indeed, of course the subject of the poem is new (at least to me) and the way it was presented was very smart, funny and still DIRTY (in my point of view), the poem is very well written one with no spelling mistakes and that is a very important thing because I beleive that spelling mistakes take alot from the beauty of any poem.
And I must talk about the tittle ( My Lover ), which was very well chosen and captures the minds of the readers (it captured mine), and I excpected seeing or reading something absolutely different! You catagorized this one as "Passion"! Well I think that is absolutely ridiculous, this isn't passion! It may be comedy or something but not passion! Also the description which I beleive to be a very important tool for the writer to use to capture the attention of the reader and to give a prior presentation to the poem and you totally succeeded in presenting the idea of your poem.
I think the words were well chosen and suits the the way the poem was written.
And also the flow and the rhyming was somehow good and didn't seem forced.
I liked the lines that says
"She never has a bad word to say. Nor anything good but that’s o.k."
Anyway I hope that my comment was somehow helpful to you and I'll end up my comment saying Good luck and keep it up.
One of my personal fave's as well. I have not gone away disappointed, I came here to read something dirty and you came to the rescue. I read this the first time and it is just as amusing the second go-round. My rubber jump suit with the cut-out nipple holes is coming out today- you've inspired me.
ha, nice one. not the first of this type i have read, but funny in it s own right and something good to read in the morning before i start my day. just dont burn her. dont spark up a fag after you have given her one, you might lose her forever. and that would be the worst thing, take care on1eday.co.uk
......(still laughing)............................Okay, i think i'm done, holy sh*t this is funny and i love it. i'm starting to really like you, knows good punk music, very cool diverse poems, plays in a band......uhm.... i'm envisioning lots of tattoes, mainly on the arms, peircings...maybe.
okay enough about you, i like this because it flows well, the subject matter is tough and you made it all fit, making sure you hit on everything you possibly could and you made it f*cking hilarious. I want to put it on my favs list, will people think i'm weird....[censored] it... Punk rock & rubber lovers!! late CC
Submission Name: MY RUBBER LOVER
