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    dots Submission Name: Gaia's Childrendots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Gaia is Mother Earth. Be one with the being that birthed you :).


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    dotsGaia's Childrendots
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    Revolve,
    Like Gaia,
    Take a turn for the better.
    Lap up light
    from an inner sun
    and shine
    inside; out
    and in and out
    like the breath of life.

    Likes waves,
    emotions
    are on a roll.
    Bouyant, lifting.
    Brave children of Gaia
    take heart and grow.
    Each storm is an opportunity
    To learn
    what you already know.

    Fear is but a message
    to challenge,
    to change
    and let go.
    Forgiveness will heal
    more in YOUR soul
    than the ravaging bite of
    a vengeful snake,
    that spreads hateful poison.

    Who is it you pretend to be
    because you fear who you are?
    BOTH are masks.
    Let slip great pretender,
    Break free the walls you build.
    Inside is the truth
    of who you are
    Shining loudly
    in its' quietness.

    Be brave children of Gaia,
    Each of you are merely a grain of sand
    on a universal beach.
    All these mirrors
    are here to be faced.
    Wake up!
    Earthquakes reshape worlds
    and change is the only constant.
    Navigation is a skillful art
    that can be re-learned.

    Caterpillars crawl on their bellies
    in the dirt, eating leaves.
    Crysalised walls of protection
    promote change.
    Metamorphasis is a colourful miracle.
    "Butterflies breakout
    and learn to fly free.
    Nature is a giant library
    with many books to unshelve,
    read into it what you will, but
    caterpillar
    evolve!"







    Submitted on 2005-04-06 02:14:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the message here Kate, and overall you treat it beautifully.
    I like the Gaia reference, and the way you weave human nature with its tears and fears into the vast tapestry of Nature.

    "Who is it you pretend to be
    because you fear who you are?
    BOTH are masks."

    It is so true that most of us don't really know who we are, and how we fit into Gaia's big picture.We aren't always respectful of the Great Mother, and certainly don't treat our siblings as equals. There is a lot of thought provoked here, and its all good stuff.

    It may be a tad long as i felt it reached it's highpoint in the fourth strophe, and much of the fifth and sixth could be combined more tightly into one strophe.

    Overall though, other than few typos, it is satisfying thoughtful read
    Thanks for submitting
    Sally
    | Posted on 2005-04-22 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      Be brave children of Gaia,
    Each of you are merely a grain of sand
    on a universal beach.
    All these mirrors
    are here to be faced.
    Wake up!
    Earthquakes reshape worlds
    and change is the only constant.
    Navigation is a skillful art
    that can be re-learned.

    i especially love these lines. it is all right there, isn't it? change is the only thing that we can always count on. we must be brave and face our fears and move with the challenges that confront us each day. i love the idea of us all being children of Mother Earth. we need to treat her with respect too ,and we are failing greatly in that area.

    thanks for sharing. this is such a wonderful message for us all.
    | Posted on 2005-04-10 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Kate, i think I would type a short idea of what Gaia is in the description blank. Though alot of us know something of this, some don't. I don't see that anything you've written here is misleading or hard to understand. I'm with you, I love nature and evil is someone turning our own minds against themselves.
    The reference to fear is perfect and the serpent, that works too. I see this as a well done write and celebration of nature, thanks for sharing,
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      There are things I like and things I dislike about this poem. I am not quite sure of the logic in the stanzas.
    You say both "children of Gaia" and "child of Gaia", which is kind of confusing, as to whom you are speaking, such as a group of people or one person. Perhaps that is not important, just my own observation. Also, the stanzas that start "Fear is but a message..." and "Who is it you pretend to be..." seem out of place in this poem. It seems as though they could be part of another poem. And I understand why you include the last stanza, it fits with the whole poem, as far as analogies about changes go, but when I read the poem, and get to the first line of the last stanza, it is disruptive. Don't get me wrong, this is an amazing poem.
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by redthewitch | [ Reply to This ]


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