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    dots Submission Name: Animated words...dots

    Author: ladyngold
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 585/520/99
    Words: 9
    Class/Type: Haiku/Happy
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       This poem is written as an Senryu which is in a Haiku 5-7-5 but minus the nature theme criteria.

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    dotsAnimated words...dots

    Animated words
    dance gracefully on paper
    pantomiming life

    Submitted on 2005-04-06 04:45:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Cheryl, I've been remiss by missing this one. It shows your improvement over the past year, this is what senryus and haikus are all about.

    The image and thoughts that the few syllables conjure up are deep and lasting, five great big stars from me!

    be haiku

    | Posted on 2006-05-25 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...this haiku stuff is pretty cool. You have quite the talent for it. I agree with Intricate1's comments. So what is senrya??? I am not too hip on the verbage and the dictionary is waaaaayyyyy on the other side of the room.

    I especially like how you managed to get images into my mind from using only eight words. Very well done Cheryl. Have a good day and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      Lovely imagery. It's true.. poetry does seem to dance on paper..as one is writing it.. and/or reading it. . . Such as these few words seem to do that you have expressed so well here :)

    Take Care!
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      *Knock Knock* Just me again !!
    You expressed poetry so well in this ...I havnt quite mastered the art of commenting on a Haiku ...So *sigh* ....Hey ..I think im starting to like this stuff though ...This was just a nice lil dedication to writing ...I can't comment too much on the technical side obviously ..but to me ...it was beautiful ...Blessed Be ...And another fine job done by you
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]

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