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    dots Submission Name: Really Not Medots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Misc/Serious
    Total Views: 875
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       This is absolutely just a collaboration of different thoughts put together to make a poem about some of the things that go on in my warped head.


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    dotsReally Not Medots
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    Blah today
    it isn't one of the best
    I am insanely bored and out of tune

    watch while I dangle from the edge
    you think that I may jump
    you think me suicidal
    nah
    I am just whispering for help

    I have these emotions all delt with
    it's the math I hate
    formulas and your face
    to hell with it all

    These pills work when I want them to
    other wise I get sick

    stomache almost on empty and gas is too high
    I have these emotions controlled thankyou
    but if you wanna help
    just leave me alone
    or don't




    Submitted on 2005-04-06 14:25:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This makes sense to me. (Not a lot of things do so be proud of yourself). I can see a teenager standing at a cliff making someone think that they're going to jump when they're not. Then they turn around and say "I'm not stupid enough to do this. I just need your help that I've been asking for all these years that you neglected me." Keep up the good work. (I like it when things make sense to me). lol.
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by manda_bear | [ Reply to This ]
      its like i wrote this
    i like the reference to the math and formulas
    ther is really to many variables to keep up with
    i have dangled on the edge most of my life and recieved very little help,except helping myself
    you also used reference to current events and i liked that too}gas

    stop reading my mind
    lol
    wes all
    toyysruss
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by toyysruss | [ Reply to This ]
      This was a well written piece. For some reason this one stands out from most things I read on this site. I like this a lot; it's quite emotional. And on another note, I like your picture. I have the exact same one printed out and in a sheet somewhere in my journal thing;except mine is inverse. I got in off of a google search, if you were wondering, wich I doubt. I suppose I should end this comment thing now, well, I hope you have a nice life. Congratulations.

    Apatheticly,
    Someone's dying hero.
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by bloodwing | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very different from your other writes having a bad day or just another day this was good and interesting how you step into the emotions and then step out good read and good write
    thanx for your previous comments
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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