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    dots Submission Name: So Dementeddots

    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
    Total Views: 788
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       Rough draft, please comment. going though a rough time.

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    dotsSo Dementeddots

    Every day I think of you
    I think of homicidal thought.
    Slitting your throat.
    Tying you up slitting your wrists and than dragging you by the hair all the way in to the bathtub and let all the blood run into the drain.
    Releasing my anger and my pain
    by thinking of you.
    Iím so close
    I stand there next to your room door.
    With pills, knife ,and a rope.
    I'm so demented
    Wanting to kill my own sister.
    Wait there is another way.
    Why not take my own life.
    Tonight could be the night I take my life.
    So this family can go back to there perfect ways once again.
    So this is my farewell to the world I hate so much

    Submitted on 2005-04-06 16:17:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You know what i want to kill me sister sometimes(she 13 I'm 16) we are like night and day, she being day and me night, we agree on nothing and I'm the one that gets in trouble, fun fun but yeah you seem to like ropes and knifes and pills(are they purple?)(i had to ask) but it was good reminded me of how much i love my sister(not really)
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      I really really think this needs a rewrite.
    It has potental but at it's current form it not really that good.
    You do show that anger that pain that you are going through but its just not strong enough.

    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      be happy, i really liked this one...cause i'm demented too...don't hate the world...there are somethings worth living for...i'm adding this to my favs...
    | Posted on 2005-04-06 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]

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