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    dots Submission Name: If I was the man of your lifedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 388
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 726
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2230



    Description:
       writing about some thought that I have for a girl.
    Please comment on it. It's a rough draft.


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    dotsIf I was the man of your lifedots
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    If I
    was the
    man in your life
    I'll make you my wife
    and treat you right
    Buy you
    Flowers every
    single day.
    Give you power.
    Do you what ever you say.
    Heard rumors your man is treating you wrong.
    Now baby listen to this song.

    If I
    was the
    man in your life
    I'll make you my wife
    and treat you right
    Buy you
    Flowers every
    single day.
    Give you power.
    Do you what ever you say.
    Your man treats you wrong even though it seems like you fell from the heavens.
    Your eyes glisten like diamonds
    Your hair dark as the night.


    If I
    was the
    man in your life
    I'll make you my wife
    and treat you right
    Buy you
    Flowers every
    single day.
    Give you power.
    Do you what ever you say.
    Hold you tight while we dance under the moonlight.
    I will always love you.
    Like the rising of dawn, and the rising of moon into the night.
    The sight of you makes my heart skip a beat and makes that heart go faster than any normal heart beat.

    If I
    was the
    man in your life
    I'll make you my wife
    and treat you right
    Buy you
    Flowers every
    single day.
    Give you power.
    Do you what ever you say.
    You always need some one to love you.
    I will be the one to love you
    If let me
    Be the one and the only one.
    Your the one and the only I will love.
    I hope you feel the same.
    This is no game
    don't play games with a fragile heart.
    My key to my heart is already in the lock
    All you got to do baby is twist and you will know every thing and you will get all my love. from the day I live now.
    To the day I die.

    I love you and only you
    Now baby tell me what what you want do?
    Stay with the man that hurts you and is never there when you need help the most.
    Or
    Come with me and I will not hurt you and i'll be there with you when you need help the most.




    Submitted on 2005-04-06 23:27:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i like this its really sweet. great job it seems that you really care about this girl. so i hope that you two figure something out and she dumps here present bf good job keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by sweet_rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      you labled this work as lyrics and to be honest they were great there were a few parts that just didnt fit but other than that they were great. i can tell that you really care about this girl you should sing this to her if she is right for you shell listen and take you instead of her hurtful b/f i wish the best of luck to you and i hope everthing works out for you
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by kcck | [ Reply to This ]


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