Description: It's just one of those times when you find yourself STARING at the person across the room and EVERYTHING leaves your mind beside the PHYSICAL EERIENCE you've shared with this guy!!!
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Forgive Me if I Stare -------------------------------------------
I try to control myself
I try not to stare
But I just can't help myself
Thinking of the things we came to share
Imagers of you naked has been clouding my head
Your broad shoulders
Your naked back
Your muscular arms
Your rippled stomach
Your open legs
Your manliness . . . all huge
. . . calling my fiesty fingers
my luscious lips
my squivering skin
my moist mouth
. . . yearning for the very center of me
Thats the reason why I stare
Cause last night you were so hot
When you worked me up
And stripped me bare
Madam- I am simply digging ALL of your poetry. This is a horny time of my life, & your poetry is pure sensual, pure horndog, pure swollen expansion of mind, body & shared space. Definitely relate. You've got such descriptive, energetic language & the bit of repitition is hypnotic. You definitely capture the compelling, radar type feeling of ATTRACTION. thankyou!
Awww what about the poor guys that aint huge! LOL I know people say its how it is used, they just say it to make it easier to take the truth. As for me... heh heh heh check out "Muddy River" by CleoCollier, you wanna see what a man can do for his woman???? ITs all there. Oh an I did like your poem. well done your friend ben
hmm, I appreciate what you were saying with this, and I thought it was fairly well written. I do aggree with Cyanide about the "horny load if [censored]" part, but I could see where that made it original. I didn't personaly like it, partly because of the spelling errors that really destracted me from the flow and "movement" of what you were trying to say. Maybe if you revised it a little it would be a better read.
lol I always have to laugh when people get offended with the more "erotic" writes...
anyhoo about the poem...It was original in structure though for me it read a lil too rough for me to get the full sensual affect. Though I did like the way you brought the images of his flesh across your readers mind.
There was one line in here though that just made me feel like you were selling yourself short as a writer...and that was "Cause last night you were so hot" the "so hot" part just didn't work well with this mature write...in fact it made me giggle and think of Paris Hilton...but that is probably because she has ruined that phrase for anyone here in America...perhaps it's not as bad for you in SA.
LOL! I totally know what you mean... and you're like, Ha, would you look at that, I'm staring! I can totally relate, this was cute and completely true. ^_^ awesome! I even like the Baby, it was well placed ~Coraz Windy