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    dots Submission Name: Forgive Me if I Staredots
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    Author: AfricanPrincess
    ASL Info:    21/F/SA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 222/201/31
    Words: 361
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       It's just one of those times when you find yourself STARING at the person across the room and EVERYTHING leaves your mind beside the PHYSICAL EERIENCE you've shared with this guy!!!
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    dotsForgive Me if I Staredots
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    I try to control myself
    I try not to stare
    But I just can't help myself
    Thinking of the things we came to share

    Imagers of you naked has been clouding my head
    Your broad shoulders
    Your naked back
    Your muscular arms
    Your rippled stomach
    Your open legs
    Your manliness . . . all huge
    all entertaining
    all inviting

    . . . calling my fiesty fingers
    my luscious lips
    my squivering skin
    my moist mouth

    . . . yearning for the very center of me

    Thats the reason why I stare
    Cause last night you were so hot
    When you worked me up
    And stripped me bare

    So Baby please forgive me if
    I STARE !




    Submitted on 2005-04-07 10:28:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yeahhhh. I love this right here. I'm glad I finally found you. Everybody have their staring moments right. No need for any additions. ~1 love
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by InnerEnergy | [ Reply to This ]
      Girl... You make a man want to run to San antonio. My goodness, can a poem get any sexier than this. I thought about all the women I would like to see naked.
    My God.. see what you have started.
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by SmoothePapa | [ Reply to This ]
      Madam-
    I am simply digging ALL of your poetry. This is a horny time of my life, & your poetry is pure sensual, pure horndog, pure swollen expansion of mind, body & shared space. Definitely relate. You've got such descriptive, energetic language & the bit of repitition is hypnotic. You definitely capture the compelling, radar type feeling of ATTRACTION. thankyou!
    | Posted on 2005-04-16 00:00:00 | by CleoCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      Your ass is a FREAK and I like the HELL outta yo ass! I'm moving to where you at! I'm on my way right now!

    *Yes, I need a one way to San Antonio*

    Keep writing this freaky [censored]! I'm loving it!



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    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by xtremegentleman | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww what about the poor guys that aint huge! LOL I know people say its how it is used, they just say it to make it easier to take the truth. As for me... heh heh heh check out "Muddy River" by CleoCollier, you wanna see what a man can do for his woman???? ITs all there.
    Oh an I did like your poem. well done
    your friend ben
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      Your manliness . . . all huge

    Woo hoo! Get it girl!

    This was great. What the f is Cyanide talkin about down there?! Girl, don't trip off of people like that! Some are just beyond their own ignorance.

    I loved it. Every bit of it to me was great and well felt.

    Great job!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm, I appreciate what you were saying with this, and I thought it was fairly well written. I do aggree with Cyanide about the "horny load if [censored]" part, but I could see where that made it original. I didn't personaly like it, partly because of the spelling errors that really destracted me from the flow and "movement" of what you were trying to say. Maybe if you revised it a little it would be a better read.

    -Emma -
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Emma_closes | [ Reply to This ]
      lol I always have to laugh when people get offended with the more "erotic" writes...

    anyhoo about the poem...It was original in structure though for me it read a lil too rough for me to get the full sensual affect. Though I did like the way you brought the images of his flesh across your readers mind.

    There was one line in here though that just made me feel like you were selling yourself short as a writer...and that was "Cause last night you were so hot" the "so hot" part just didn't work well with this mature write...in fact it made me giggle and think of Paris Hilton...but that is probably because she has ruined that phrase for anyone here in America...perhaps it's not as bad for you in SA.
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
      Now I think, cyanide has some homo issues he needs to deal with. This was a simple lustful poem,which i think is so almost that a woman would want to write about thier man,bravo

    hey it not like men don't do the same thing,lol

    keep writing and i will keep reading
    Edward
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL! I totally know what you mean... and you're like, Ha, would you look at that, I'm staring! I can totally relate, this was cute and completely true. ^_^ awesome! I even like the Baby, it was well placed ~Coraz Windy
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]


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