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    dots Submission Name: This Americadots
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    Author: Emma_closes
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 88/111/44
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Political
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    Description:
       Sort of a rant about the general state of things in this culture, this country. It saddens me to see the way things are going.


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    dotsThis Americadots
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    I'm a part of this America
    This Columbine
    with Agent Orange
    and Turpentine

    And open ended treaties
    illiterate embargoes
    heavy-handed deals
    How fast can your car go?
    Can you make the tires squeal?
    They give you coronaries
    plastic wrapped
    in happy meals

    I am this America
    empty-headed
    empty-hearted
    agitated
    perforated

    I thrive in car exhaust
    and hold illegal cargo
    that tried to jump the border
    and make it up to Canada
    because they can't be Americans
    and they know it
    they can't blow up nations
    their skin's not light enough
    to own a shotgun
    so save it 'hun
    because Texas is closed
    Because we're all in this together

    This America
    This Columbine
    with turpentine
    and Agent Orange




    Submitted on 2005-04-07 12:10:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey this was well done. Everyone has a right to their opinion, but only in AMERICA! Yes the things u say are somewhat true and the way you did it with good metaphors and imagery speaks volumns of your talent. Worthy of older more experianced writers. Well done
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      well this was a worthwhile read.. it's interesting to see how others see america these days.. and honestly your somewhat right.. if you really want to know the root of the problem though it's pretty simple.. people don't care about people anymore.. they care about only what's in it for them.. sad but that's what everyone has been taught all their life.. how to succeed.. yeah, at what cost though.. see, when people are no longer useful in America they are put in nursing homes and left with a "peg in em" to keep them alive.. these are physists, doctors, architects, even preachers.. yeah that's the world we live in.. people who give their lives to the people are left to rot alone by them.. great ehh?

    Adam
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Pyrosis | [ Reply to This ]


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