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    dots Submission Name: The Shattered Prismdots
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    Author: Pyrosis
    ASL Info:    24/M/TN
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 199/204/35
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
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       mkay.. for those of you who cannot guess.. this is about the fall of Lucifer.. he was also known as the prism of god.. he carried all of god's knowledge and so was corrupted for never having a soul..

    i put alot of interesting things in here but i'm just curious to see if you can find them.. this could have been better but oh well..

    Adam


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    dotsThe Shattered Prismdots
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    You honor me father
    I your prism of light.
    The very mirror of your knowledge

    Behold my brothers.
    I am chosen as the angel of light.
    I carry the knowledge of our lord
    Is their another more beautiful than I?

    “Soon I shall choose my heir”
    “He shall sit at my right hand”
    “He shall be my and the world’s most beloved son”

    It must be I father
    Grant me this right so I may shine for all your kingdom
    Let me rule this world. Let me bring your knowledge to all

    “Tis none of your kind”
    “You were created to serve”
    “These were created to live”

    You mock us by forming them from DUST
    Behold our father brothers, fool of the cosmos
    Lover of infidels…




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      i have to say this is brilliant.
    yes... i really do.
    i didnt realise that lucifer was referred to as a prism though so that is interesting.

    i think you have portrayed my understanding of this event really well.
    it interests me the way you have used dialogue to get your means across.
    i also like that you dont just portray lucifer as an evil being... i mean... at the start i am sure he genuinely loved and worshipped god... im sure that is how he gained his top-most status in heaven as the director of worship or whathaveyou...

    but its a classic tale of power corrupting and going to our head... yeah...
    the mighty schism of heaven...

    i like also the attention you give to the difference between angels and humans... the idea that angels were created solely for the purpose of worshipping god... humans are, in some ways, a step above angels in that we were given "free will" and so we are able to choose whether we love god or not...


    the only thing i question in all of this is...
    the bible indicates that Jesus was present at the creation of the world (in the beginning god created... gen 1 and then in the begginng was the word and the word was god and the word was with god... john 1) and so why would lucifer not realise that he didnt have a chance of being the right hand man of the plan...?
    i guess that power and ego (which my pastor calls edging god out) can cause us to be blind to the most obvious of things sometimes...

    anyways... there are a lot of things in this piece that i like. i can see that you have thought into this piece. youve done really well.
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmmmm NICE! I usually don't tell people when I do a Lucifer poem, I just let them figure it out.

    ...i likes it, it moves from one feeling to another very fast, going through the story like... BAM just like that.

    Anyway the quotation marks gave it a nice physical touch. ~CObRA
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      Ahhh but the connections here. One with moderate knowledge of the bible can surely see where you are going here. This says it all:

    You mock us by forming them from DUST
    Behold our father brothers, fool of the cosmos
    Lover of infidels…

    Especially capitolizing DUST.
    well done
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      I did not know that about Lucifer and I found this piece interesting and I had to read a couple of times. It's a thought-provoking piece and although I believe that nothing is truly evil this view fits with many religious themes. Thanks for sharing. Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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