I closed my I
and opened my EYE
to wander with the red hawks
LIFE from up above
Eye became the poppy
petals flowing with wind
Eye was the leaf
no fear of falling
Do you have any idea how many people start off their comments with "wow"
You should be happy though, members continue to flatter you, and I think in many cases, you earn it.
I've always found your work challenging in a completely refreshing way. Your line breaks are spaz and unpredictable, rhyme or reason doesn't matter, it keeps the reader's focus to detail and subject at hand. You remain consistant with your style, and while branching out once in awhile is good, mastery of your original style is essential.
(Notice I'm not talking much about your poem's topic.)
Like I said, its challenging. You have a gift for expressing optimism with nature. Its not something I practice, however I do believe in it.
mmm prettyful. You know what? these past few days have been absolutely GORGEOUSFUL, I know exactly what you mean! Sometimes I'm walking, like home from the bus or something, and I just get this enormus happy feeling and I have to jumpa nd sing and dance because I just feel so happy and at peace with the world. I mean, the SUN is shining! How great is that? Anyway your poem reminded me of those great feelings *sigh* <3 oooh, I've been reverted to symbol-talking. Bai now! ~Cora
You are right I did enjoy this piece. The style you used I am beginning to see more and more on here. At first I di not like it, perhaps it was because others attempts were not as good as yours. I really liked this piece. great imagery, masterfully done your friend ben
Wow, its great how you can close your eyes and open your eye like that. You are great. So vivid and full of life. Freedom you gain from within. I am not a philosopher, but I did stay at a Holiday Inn Express once... Have a good one and keep smilin'