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    dots Submission Name: Eye Wanderdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 529
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 499



    Description:
       Just a waking dream I had on the way 2 work: I'm not a secretary but I play 1 on tv...he he he
    Love, Peace, Joy!!!
    Epiphany ; > }


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    dotsEye Wanderdots
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    I closed my I
    and opened my EYE
    to wander with the red hawks
    diving
    gliding
    seeing
    LIFE from up above
    Colors magnified
    freedom inherent.
    Eye became the poppy
    brightly colored
    opening
    thankful
    exquisite
    petals flowing with wind
    freedom inherent.
    Eye was the leaf
    glorious green
    sprouting
    gleaming
    reflecting
    no fear of falling
    freedom inherent.




    Submitted on 2005-04-07 14:02:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Do you have any idea how many people start off their comments with "wow"

    You should be happy though, members continue to flatter you, and I think in many cases, you earn it.

    I've always found your work challenging in a completely refreshing way.
    Your line breaks are spaz and unpredictable, rhyme or reason doesn't matter, it keeps the reader's focus to detail and subject at hand.
    You remain consistant with your style, and while branching out once in awhile is good, mastery of your original style is essential.

    (Notice I'm not talking much about your poem's topic.)

    Like I said, its challenging. You have a gift for expressing optimism with nature. Its not something I practice, however I do believe in it.

    Wouldn't be caught reading it to anyone though.

    I dig it.

    MyX
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm prettyful. You know what? these past few days have been absolutely GORGEOUSFUL, I know exactly what you mean! Sometimes I'm walking, like home from the bus or something, and I just get this enormus happy feeling and I have to jumpa nd sing and dance because I just feel so happy and at peace with the world. I mean, the SUN is shining! How great is that? Anyway your poem reminded me of those great feelings *sigh* <3 oooh, I've been reverted to symbol-talking. Bai now! ~Cora
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Cora Windover | [ Reply to This ]
      You are right I did enjoy this piece. The style you used I am beginning to see more and more on here. At first I di not like it, perhaps it was because others attempts were not as good as yours. I really liked this piece. great imagery, masterfully done
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, its great how you can close your eyes and open your eye like that. You are great. So vivid and full of life. Freedom you gain from within. I am not a philosopher, but I did stay at a Holiday Inn Express once...
    Have a good one and keep smilin'
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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