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    dots Submission Name: Ghetto Skunkdots
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    Author: Stwcjj
    ASL Info:    27/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    5.69 - 327/149/13
    Words: 176
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 1376
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1391



    Description:
       This was kind of inspired by something I saw :) This obviously is not intended as a "serious" poem. And yes, I did add my own vocabulary word(s). (My apologies to the English purists :) )


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    dotsGhetto Skunkdots
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    Brass knuckle bashin'
    Stilleto slashin'
    Slapped his mother
    Killed his brother.

    The story of "Ed"
    Gangsta of N. Clinton Ave...................




    Struttin streets
    with a crack creased eye,
    Knockin' up stores
    Is what got Ed high.

    He'd disappear from cops
    without a trace,
    They'd only recall
    his grinning face.

    Day in and day out
    Ed could not be stopped,
    All those who'd try
    would end up popped.

    Then it happend to Ed
    a black/white creature appeared,
    Looked him square in the eye
    and was not affeared.

    This ghastly black Grendel
    now steaming and pissed,
    Was challenging Ed
    with it's peculiar mist.

    An odd opponent
    Ed could not beat,
    He shouldn't have messed
    with this creature in heat.

    Green lines sizzled up
    from an artists dream,
    Noses were pinched
    from scents too obscene.

    Unable to cope
    with that nasty spray,
    Ed leapt from a bridge
    and passed away.

    Now stories are told
    of this top punk,
    Ed's remembered with laughter
    as the Ghetto Skunk.




    Submitted on 2005-04-07 16:59:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great imagery again, a unique piece. You've got skills! I agree w/ Ben when he wrote 'good form & good rhymes. Not much more to say that hasn't already been said:)
    ~Tonya V.
    | Posted on 2005-11-05 00:00:00 | by Tonya V. | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. we got suicidal squirrels, and now ghetto skunks?? damn, i guess i'm gonna have to write about the raccoon that followed me home the other day now, ain't i? haha, this was funny. good job. poor ed thought he was gangsta... guess he got "skunked" up huh? ok, bad joke... i'm gonna go now. ...bb...

    XoXo
    ~TaY~
    | Posted on 2005-05-07 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
      Quite an original and funny piece here. A good, comical write about a B.A. Punk getting done in by a skunk. I'd say he got what was coming to 'em. Nice work!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-05-01 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      LMFAO! This is a classic! I am really laughing right now! Your imagination is CRAZY!

    I have never read anything on this level. This is far beyond what I expected from the title. LOL

    I am adding this to my favorites! LOL

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-04-25 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was very interesting...at first you think it's going to be just a silly, hood poem, but then you totally surprise me and go somewhere i didn't expect. well written, full of flow and style.
    Good Job !

    CC
    | Posted on 2005-04-23 00:00:00 | by C. Starr | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. This is so funny! Oh man. This is a laugh- out-loud peice! I love the personal vocab you added. It just wouldn't be the same if you used real words. This really cheared me up. Great job!
    | Posted on 2005-04-15 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]
      YEAH! this made my morning a little better** it's got a nice laugh factor to it and yet it's kinda sad :( really though you did a great job coming up with this one, what a great and unique idea* the words you chose made it flow so well and the rhymes were well, how they should be.

    Jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by _winky_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I just love it when people come up with such funny little insaulting nick names, like ghetto skunk. I really liked this it was good for a laugh. Some times you just have to laugh. I too had the intention of just browsing though and just comment a little about how you could change it, becasue thats what I usually do, but once I read it, now I wouldnt change a thing. I'd even add it to my favorites but that wont work for me. so your outta luck. As you will soon find out most people add some of their own spelling's in and no matter how much you say or who says it, they wont change , you get used to it.
    This was a great comical post.
    Kacey
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by Lachesis | [ Reply to This ]
      If it had a hidden meaning I missed it...I simply enjoyed it as a well written comis poem. Ghetto Skunk - that's great!
    Good on you for writing something funny!
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is great! I usually don't go in for ghetto stuff. But I absolutly loved this. I actually began to read it with the intention of just browsing it and offering some lame comment just to up my number of responses. But before I knew it I read it through and then read it again. Excellant job, very good form and good rhymes.
    your friend
    ben
    | Posted on 2005-04-07 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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