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A Sonnet for Separation

Author: etheariac
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This is a Petrarchan sonnet I wrote for English class about the love of Dido and Aeneas, the Ancient Roman's epic hero. Aeneas come to Queen Dido's city of Carthage and falls in love with her, but according to his fate he must leave to discover Rome. She is heartbroken and burns herself as a result. The rhyme scheme is ABBA ABBA CDE CDE. eNJOY!

A Sonnet for Separation

In the distant calling sea sppeds forth a noble Trojan ship,
Aeneas wandering hopeless toward a beckoning nest.
The dove's sweet wings sing intention of her tender bleeding breast,
tender from Cupid's wounds she spoke these pains from flushed lip,

"O Aeneas, may I be the isle thou seek along this trip?"
The enamored hero nurtured here, the gods he tends to test,
for Dido swept his wandering heart to that blissful lover's rest;
blind to fate, he had not seen city roots so apt to rip.

Fate is a cruel master for a doubly indentured knave.
Her soul is cut in two, bowing to love, and burnt by fire;
A dream drew dear Aeneas far from the arms of his queen.

Love proved no protection to Dido, its devoutest slave;
A fleeting eternity exposed fueled an anger that lit her funeral pyre,
and fates cut thread as ships did tread on seas his mast cut to seams.

Submitted on 2005-04-07 21:33:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Petrarchan sonnet... wish i knew a few english instructors that would cover that, or any other for of sonnet. I'm more Shakespearean myself when it comes to sonneteering.
i must say, this piece is captivating. i read this off a hunch. most people will write a bad poem then call it a sonnet in hopes of getting attention, though it does not follow the proper setup of a sonnet. makes me want to breakdown and beat someone with a book.
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by hybridmagnolia | [ Reply to This ]
  Do you ever say "Aeneas" and just start laughing? I sure do.

One doesn't see much in the way of Petrarchan sonnets. Good choice.

Oh, spelling typo. First line:

"In the distant calling sea sppeds"

Unless that is some kind of weird Greek thing.

I like the last two stanzas for their mirrored nature... pyre with fire, and indentured knave and a devout slave. The style itself I don't think is condusive to much except telling the story itself, but you did that most excellently.
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by DeadGod | [ Reply to This ]

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