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My Warrior Song

Author: lynn7
ASL Info:    43/ St. Augustine, FL
Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 419 /288 /103
Words: 131
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I've been depressed over all the poetry I've been
reading about death and sucide over the last week.
So I guess I wrote this for all the dark poets out there. It's not that great.. It's the thought that counts.

My Warrior Song

the vile hands of the night
have no concern for you
only death is what they seek
if only you’ll realize what
lies have been placed upon you
that there is no other way out
this is my warrior song for you
if only you will hear
my spirit flows from deep
within his misty blue haze
to show you the way out
there is a light at the end
a truth that is within these eyes
a love that I can not yet comprehend
a passion I can not hide
all you have to do is ask
all you have to do is seek
then open your eyes
write what you see
this is my warrior song to you
to set you free

Submitted on 2005-04-07 23:31:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  well, its aperant this is one of those things that you don't want to fix, but still i understand it keep up the work muh friend.
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]

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