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    dots Submission Name: whore (revised)dots

    Author: painfullyme
    ASL Info:    23/F/MA
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 335/456/72
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       i've been working on this for a couple of weeks. i think it's come a long way. suggestions?

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    dotswhore (revised)dots

    painful, the notion
    that i was never more
    than a girl you had trouble
    turning into a whore

    scary, the thought
    that no matter what
    let myself get too close
    to becoming your slut

    used me for money
    the sex always free
    never quite cared
    what you were doing to me

    lied to me, lover
    told me to trust
    then used me until
    i quenched your lust

    took me for granted
    turned love to despise
    now, previously hidden,
    hate has lost it's disguise

    Submitted on 2005-04-07 23:33:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this, the meaning of this poem is so true, and it shouldnt be hidden, but they are much the slut as the person in question, remember it takes two to tango x x x x
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm... i am sorry you had to go through that... that ind of thing sucks... i cannot really relate... because nothing like that has happened to me... and i have not done anything like that... but the poem is well written to an extent where i can feel how you felt when you wrote it... mheh... no advice to give... my poems suck anyway... you wouldn't want my advice...
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by Esophagus1 | [ Reply to This ]

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