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    dots Submission Name: Evil Brotherdots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 45
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 1379
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    Bytes: 306



    Description:
       This was written by my adolescent son. Enuff said.


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    dotsEvil Brotherdots
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    Hello Mother,
    Hello Father,
    Why'd you make my
    Evil Brother?
    Please trade him
    For any other.
    He is evil,
    He is crazy,
    He is fat,
    He is lazy.
    He speaks nonsense
    All day long;
    I believe he smokes
    A giant bong.




    Submitted on 2005-04-07 23:41:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i liked this, it made me laugh. Good flow, good wording. Not too many write funny pieces, this one definitely qualifies. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2005-04-19 00:00:00 | by Malcolm Bishop | [ Reply to This ]
      lol Interesting little write you got there. It is simple and to the point. My one brother is exactly the same way, which is the funny thing haha. This piece could have used a bit more details throughout, and could have brought it to life more. Other than that very interesting piece you have there! lol

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    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by xeternalshadowx | [ Reply to This ]


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