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    dots Submission Name: The cycle of her lovedots
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    Author: Uruvasule
    ASL Info:    17
    Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 46/67/22
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1029
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1266



    Description:
       My english teacher introduced this standard for writing, he said it was made by the french, I wanted to try it and hgere is the result. By the way the 'standards' are the reiteration of lines from previous stanzas.


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    dotsThe cycle of her lovedots
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    She loves - awaiting to be hurt
    A fragile heart coated with stone
    The pain - crashing waves of heartache
    Thus she might never love again

    A fragile heart coated with stone
    The stone will break, if forced enough
    Thus she might never love again
    The tears will drown all her sorrow

    The stone will break, if forced enough
    A broken boulder, broken heart - she laughs
    The tears will drown all her sorrow
    Her laugh will tinkle soon once more

    A broken boulder, broken heart - she laughs
    The light emerges on the horizon
    Her laugh will tinkle soon once more
    Her heart has healed and high it soars

    The light emerges on the horizon
    A sinless day is birthed anew
    Her heart has healed and high it soars
    The night will soon catch up to her

    A sinless day is birthed anew
    The moon still lingers, waits in stillness
    The night will soon catch up to her
    She loves, see now, she loves again!

    The moon still lingers, waits in stillness
    The stars shine bright, allowing sight
    She loves, see now, she loves again!
    She loves - awaiting to be hurt




    Submitted on 2005-04-07 23:43:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this a lot. This sounds dumb, but "A fragile heart coated with stone" made me think of a jawbreaker. The only criticism I have is that you could have come up with some less traditional images. Heart of stone/broken heart/ waiting to be hurt have all been done numerous times.
    | Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      thanx for sharing this one with us, it is a unique piece of writting, and i really did enjoy reading it, keep em coming and i will look forward to reading some more of your work x x x x
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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