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The cycle of her love


Author: Uruvasule
ASL Info:    17
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 46 /67 /22
Words: 200
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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My english teacher introduced this standard for writing, he said it was made by the french, I wanted to try it and hgere is the result. By the way the 'standards' are the reiteration of lines from previous stanzas.


The cycle of her love



She loves - awaiting to be hurt
A fragile heart coated with stone
The pain - crashing waves of heartache
Thus she might never love again

A fragile heart coated with stone
The stone will break, if forced enough
Thus she might never love again
The tears will drown all her sorrow

The stone will break, if forced enough
A broken boulder, broken heart - she laughs
The tears will drown all her sorrow
Her laugh will tinkle soon once more

A broken boulder, broken heart - she laughs
The light emerges on the horizon
Her laugh will tinkle soon once more
Her heart has healed and high it soars

The light emerges on the horizon
A sinless day is birthed anew
Her heart has healed and high it soars
The night will soon catch up to her

A sinless day is birthed anew
The moon still lingers, waits in stillness
The night will soon catch up to her
She loves, see now, she loves again!

The moon still lingers, waits in stillness
The stars shine bright, allowing sight
She loves, see now, she loves again!
She loves - awaiting to be hurt




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  I like this a lot. This sounds dumb, but "A fragile heart coated with stone" made me think of a jawbreaker. The only criticism I have is that you could have come up with some less traditional images. Heart of stone/broken heart/ waiting to be hurt have all been done numerous times.
| Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
  thanx for sharing this one with us, it is a unique piece of writting, and i really did enjoy reading it, keep em coming and i will look forward to reading some more of your work x x x x
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by secret kisses | [ Reply to This ]


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