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Submission Name:
Quick Knife
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Author:
ARCHIE
ASL Info:
37 YOA Male in Africa
Elite Ratio:
2.44 - 90/126/40
Words:
21
Class/Type:
Poetry/Serious
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Description:
Almost a limerick
Quick Knife
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Quick Knife
end a life
ripping through my soul
pour my life
in a gutter cup
and sacrifice me
whole
Submitted on 2005-04-08 02:03:12
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Kind of ok needs more
and im not saying that because it is short because size doest matter here
but it just needs more
could be an awsome poem
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by
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Very short ....I loved it though ...Gutter cup ..Hmmm Sorry for this short comment ...Not a whole lot to comment on ...I enjoyed the read...I wouldnt change it ...thought i wanted more? ....*sigh* ..Good Job
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by
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