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    dots Submission Name: Quick Knifedots
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    Author: ARCHIE
    ASL Info:    37 YOA Male in Africa
    Elite Ratio:    2.44 - 90/126/40
    Words: 21
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 640
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 141



    Description:
       Almost a limerick


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    dotsQuick Knifedots
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    Quick Knife
    end a life
    ripping through my soul
    pour my life
    in a gutter cup
    and sacrifice me
    whole




    Submitted on 2005-04-08 02:03:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Kind of ok needs more
    and im not saying that because it is short because size doest matter here
    but it just needs more
    could be an awsome poem
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by acapone | [ Reply to This ]
      Very short ....I loved it though ...Gutter cup ..Hmmm Sorry for this short comment ...Not a whole lot to comment on ...I enjoyed the read...I wouldnt change it ...thought i wanted more? ....*sigh* ..Good Job
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]


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