Quick Knife by ARCHIE

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Submission Name: Quick Knife dots

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Author:	ARCHIE
ASL Info:	37 YOA Male in Africa
Elite Ratio:	2.44 - 90/126/40
Words:	21

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	659
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	141

Description:
Almost a limerick

Quick Knife dots

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Quick Knife
end a life
ripping through my soul
pour my life
in a gutter cup
and sacrifice me
whole

Submitted on 2005-04-08 02:03:12 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Kind of ok needs more
and im not saying that because it is short because size doest matter here
but it just needs more
could be an awsome poem
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by acapone | [ Reply to This ]
Very short ....I loved it though ...Gutter cup ..Hmmm Sorry for this short comment ...Not a whole lot to comment on ...I enjoyed the read...I wouldnt change it ...thought i wanted more? ....*sigh* ..Good Job
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.