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Death of a holy man

Author: Deacon
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Death of a holy man

Willowing wind floats aloft whispering voices that fight for freedom from a clattering city.

Could it be my life?

Lifted in Goosebumps, hair on end wondering when it's all going to end?

When the time comes will I pretend to be ok

strong and dignint?

OH PLEASE DEAR LORD!!!! not today..............

Submitted on 2005-04-08 08:42:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i get the impression that you are speaking of the Pope... i wonder if he had any fear of death. is "dignint" really a word or did you mean "with dignity"? i liked this because i think we all fear death a little bit and wonder when our time will come. your last line says it all, not today...
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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