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    dots Submission Name: I'm such a disgracedots
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    Author: theman
    ASL Info:    21/m/mn
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 496/478/149
    Words: 221
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsI'm such a disgracedots
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    Every time I look in the mirror.
    I thnk what a disgrace.
    I think it's race between death and I.
    Who will take; who out first.
    Death does not want me, yet i'm chasing him.
    Begging him to take me.
    After all the suicidal attemnts,I know I was not supposed to die.
    Yet i'm still chasing death
    Begging him next time let the knife go farther into my wrist.
    Let the blood leave a stian on the bath room floor to let poeple know the pain and all the hatred I have toward the people I know and the world I hate so much.

    Every time I look in the mirror.
    I thnk what a disgrace.
    My mind is in the state of total mental break down.
    Once this happens
    back away
    I could feel homicidal, suicidal. hate, and cunfusion.
    I don't know it's all happning again.
    This knife is looking as good as my girlfriend.
    The thought of death gives me a sence of happiness.
    I'm so demented.
    But thats alright.
    You don't have to worry my life is shortley going to end.
    So you don't have to hide familys and your love ones from me.
    This is the final strecht
    Know I hope I beat death.
    Because death will not take me yet.




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      i really like this and the way you make it seem like daeath is an acctual person.i think that everybody wants to die at least one time in there life.so try talking to somebody.
    | Posted on 2005-07-22 00:00:00 | by endmypain | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok do you need someone to talk to or are these poems old?(again sorry if i made you mad) this poem is awesome but you do have spelling mistakes like thnk-think stian-stain strecht-I don't know who to spell it but i don't think that is right, but other then those i loved it and i love the line" This knife is looking as good as my girlfriend" that is awesome but a girl can give you a lot more than a knife can if you know what i mean.
    ~liz~
    | Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Fadingperson | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this was a good writing. I never got bored of it every word grabbed me and made me want to keep reading! I can kinda relate to your meaning.I would really like to read some more of your poems. I think that you understand what your doing when writing and thats awsome. So keep up the good work! Later! bye
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by Evie | [ Reply to This ]
      woah dude this is awsome i aggree with Selene new is great! and awsome write! I like how your going to keep fighting and not give death another chance!

    OrenroccA
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by OrenroccA | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is really good. I like how you take a common idea and give it a twist that makes it completely new. Great write!

    -Selene
    | Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by Selene | [ Reply to This ]


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