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I stay silent


Author: Archer
ASL Info:    17/female/Oregon
Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 118 /148 /53
Words: 183
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I stay silent



Those eyes they hold me.
They hold me as tightly as your arms do.
They hold all of me.
They make me want to stay for ever with you.

I feel you near.
I feel you near when you are not there to feel.
I taste you.
I taste you and can not taste any thing else.

Why can’t I see you.
Why can’t I touch you and know your real.
Why can’t I hear you.
And know you are there beside me.

You’re gone.
Like so many others from the past.
You left.
And slowly I start to forget.

I want to say I don’t need you.
I want to say I can live with out you.
I want to say that I can move on.
But I stay mute.

I say nothing at all.
I need you.
I can’t live with out you.
I can never love another.
And still I am silent.
Only a tear tells you I am there.




Submitted on 2005-04-08 14:17:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  oh this reminds me soo much of things i wish to forget but its not your fault (really ). You express yourself really great and i loved your poem, i wish i could write like you, i blamed my last writer's block.

You’re gone.
Like so many others from the past.
You left.
And slowly I start to forget.

this was my fav part because its soo true, you start to forget yet something always pulls you back like a dog on a leash [censored]s! anyway good luck and i love your picture.
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, You are an amazing and heartfelt writer. I am going to go and read some of your other posts too. This is beautiful. I know what it is like to loose someone and try to get over them, wishing with everything within that you could forget them...even hate them, but you cant..they are the air you breath, the life you lived and the blood that flowd through you. I really do know what you mean. Maybe that is why I love this so much.

My favorite stanza in this piece would have to be the last one that says :

"I say nothing at all.
I need you.
I can’t live with out you.
I can never love another.
And still I am silent.
Only a tear tells you I am there"

Because it describes everything in one stanza..this in itself could have been the poem.
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by longwinterdays | [ Reply to This ]
  This is such a sucky feeling.. I know.. I don't know I may come off harsh... but I didn't really like the format. But its your poem.. But enjoyed reading it, cause many people can relate to it.. Its just lately I have been action like a b*tch. Or is it because I am stating points. I feel like me a my best friend, grew apart, and that she has changed so much. That I don't know what to believe or what do I do.. Well its a good poem.
very much liked here.

stephanie
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hey I am sorry that you feel this way. This kinda goes with me right now. Yeah like I have said to peeps before, the guy I like is now dating someone else and this would also be a great poem for him to read. I loved it. I don't know but it seems to me there are several good peeps on this site and I am not sure I should be on it, cause in my opinion I am not very good at this stuff. Well see ya later.

Angel
| Posted on 2005-04-08 00:00:00 | by ForsakenAngel | [ Reply to This ]


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