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    dots Submission Name: Living for You.dots
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    Author: Khaled AbdAllah
    ASL Info:    22 - male - Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 129/137/30
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 982
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Everything was going in its right way with my fiancee and I do not know why her so-called friends want to spoil everything. I wrote this poem in order to ensure that she will be happy and delighted with me. Hope you will like this poem.


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    dotsLiving for You.dots
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    I'm living only for you.
    But I'm scared of not being with you.
    Put your head safely on my shoulders.
    And let our so-called friends.
    Say whatever they want.
    I just want to live calmly with you.
    I do not know what's going in your mind.
    Why do you want to push me away?
    Why do you want to break up?
    Is it your desire to break my heart?
    Our is it our enemies' effect?
    I do not deserve all what
    you're doing with me.
    I know now why you do all this.
    Because you do not know me well.
    You are afraid of your new life.
    And this is your right.
    You want a calm and a safe life.
    I promise you that I'll do my best.
    I'll pay my life to make you happy.
    I'll not let them spoil all what
    What I have dreamt of.





    Submitted on 2005-04-09 12:11:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi Khaled your poem comes straight from your heart so it must be good. You are such a nice person that she will have to choose you. And I hope she does. I don't think this poem shows any weakness, it is just about your emotions and if emotions are weak than everyone who has a heart must be weak. You always manage to bring your feelings to the paper, and that is why I admire your work. I will end up saying best of luck and lots of love shabnam
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by shabnam | [ Reply to This ]
      I will say this, never ever show this poem to your G/f women in general hate beggers and weak men, I am not saying you are weak,but your poem does say that loud and clear. You never need anyone to complete you, you have to complete yourself and she is there to enhance your life and vice/versa.

    Any women or man marry a person who listen to thier friend over you when your treating them as well as i believe you are, then it will never work.

    I do wish you the best.
    | Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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