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It was in Gods Word.....


Author: Lil_Santo
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More dark Raindrops are falling........


It was in Gods Word.....



as I spread my wings you deserve to die
the things you did made an angel cry
lets walk, before you're outlined in chaulk
lets walk, down the street and have a talk
you told God...
you would be Good
you told God
but maybe he misunderstood
it didn't take you long before you fell off track
and now a Saint is here to put you back
you lack
the only thing we ever cared about
the only fucking thing a person shouldn't live without
to hell with your money and up to date fashion
the one thing you lacked in your life was compassion
so now I'm here to lay you down
put you here without a sound
take you there to the underground
where the devil will torture your soul around
Time to go, but rest asured
that your life in hell....was in Gods Word




Submitted on 2005-04-09 17:12:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow, remind me not to mess with you! the one thing that i'm curious about here is:

"the things you did made an angel cry"

what exactly did this person do wrong? (puedes decirme mas tarde, si tu quieres). guess it must have been pretty bad. well, i thought it was good. nice job. ...bb...

XoXo
~TaY~
| Posted on 2005-05-08 00:00:00 | by Phoenix2004 | [ Reply to This ]
  and do the Saint speaks...

This was a wonderful post. True it may rub some the wrong way but who cares...I feel sorry for those who don't believe..

anyhoo good post everyone else already pointed out some of the lil tweaks it needs so *shrug*
| Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  Dark raindrops...very dark indeed but in "IT" is lightness an the darkness only lasts as long as you feel you must suffer "IT" to understand "IT". Nice presentation and I thought the artwork @ top was beautiful animation. Great day 2 u! Love, Peace, Joy@@!
| Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This was good. It has a very interesting perspective. It was definitely not what I was expecting when I saw the title. However, the title is the reason I read it. Nicely done. Makes one think.
| Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by AngelOutlaw | [ Reply to This ]
  What is strange is as I started to read this poem, I got a call from my sister,that My grandmother had just died and the reason I choose to read your poem was because of your title, she was 94 and was the greatest grandmother anyone could ever ask for, when My drunken father would beat us, she would always step in with her Love and always taught the Bible,not through the words,but by being a living example of how to be a loving and compassionate person.

I wouldn't dare tell what to believe or not to believe in. What happen just happen.

Byeeeeeeeeeeeeeee
| Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  I think you did a good job with this thought and I must say to Cyanide that it takes some confidence to post a piece, especially a religious piece because of people like him who can't tolerate others beliefs. I think this is great, sunshine. Never stop writing!
| Posted on 2005-04-09 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]


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