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The Last Warrior


Author: Zu
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well, i was listening to dream evil's "in flames you burn" and just during the part "you...killed my men raped my land and ruined our lives, till i stand in command , in flames you burn" i got mad and i started writing a saga about a warrior, the last warrior, yeah perhaps the last samurai (the movie) helped too.

btw to everyone who loves traditional power metal....GO LISTEN TO DREAM EVIL.


The Last Warrior



Fighting alone
There’s no one to mourn
He will fight alone tonight
As he has done all these years
He will go on fighting till the light
Fight for his fear, against his fear.

Villains of the light behold
There is one more warrior left
He is fighting for the honour you stole
Fighting against the fear he so long kept
His salvation lies in the blood shed
His sword is his only friend
Beware and step afoot with dread
For all you know it could be the end.

There is no return
He can only burn
He will fight and live or die
He is the last in line of them all
He will win or among his ancestors lie
In front of the enemy he is the only wall.

Villains of the light behold
There is one more warrior left
He is fighting for the honour you stole
Fighting against the fear he so long kept
His salvation lies in the blood shed
His sword is his only friend
Beware and step afoot with dread
For all you know it could be the end.

Tears flow
Tears of pain
Tears drive insane
He is fighting alone
He…
With his ruined life
With a stained knife
Will not die.

Break his bones
Kill his body
Inflict him with stones
But tonight
The burning warrior is alight
Tonight
There is no wrong or right
Tonight
He will fight!

Villains of the light behold
There is one more warrior left
He is fighting for the honour you stole
Fighting against the fear he so long kept
His salvation lies in the blood shed
His sword is his only friend
Beware and step afoot with dread
For all you know it could be the end.




Submitted on 2005-04-10 00:29:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Well Zu dude, I'm thinking that this is very specific for a song. I mean, its not relatable, which is probably why this has few comments, whereas mine write from personal experience.

Anyway, to the write itself. You have a brilliant mind. I've always told you this, but I can't write about specific things like "the last warrior" so we're in completely different fields and I respect as a writer of a completely different kind of lyrics.

Still, this write is kick arse and I can't believe I haven't read or commented on it before now. The plot is original and I'd love to hear what kind of riffs would go with this. I'm thinking Four Horsemen at the moment, but that's me ;-)

Good write Zu dude,
James
| Posted on 2005-07-07 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
  Zu this is nucking futs. I mean seriosuly, this is crazy good. At first I was reading it like a poem, and it wasnt coming on as crazy good to me. Then I read it as lyrics (as intended) and I was blown away. This could be SUCH a powerful song, and I mean really powerful.

"Fighting alone
There’s no one to mourn
He will fight alone tonight"

That repition, although little, caught my eye. I listen to music all the time and cant stand hearing those little repitions. Its mainly in pop music, and this is NOT pop music so...well actually I lost ym train of thought. Anyway, just wanted to suggest chaning that.

Apart from that ONE SMALL TINY MINUTE thing, I really really really enjoyed this piece. This is def. going on my favourites and if I dont hear this one th radio within the next couple years ill be very disappointed.

-Kayla
| Posted on 2005-04-10 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]


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