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Seven times Seven

Author: neonlights
ASL Info:    20, male, europe
Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 145 /133 /59
Words: 91
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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I did not intent this to be pornographic in any sort of's just an apotheosis of the sexual emotions.

Seven times Seven

Your body suffocates my thoughts
with masochistic hedonism
Hard bodies roll on the floor in ecstasy
by the emotional pluralism

Strong arms which take control
and guide me
And a handsome Italian head
which cuddles besides me

I breathe hard as long, strong fingers
clinch on my hair
Plunging in the abyss of lust
sweaty air

Inside I quiver, a heart trembles
and mauve delirium rises to Heaven
As my head rubs against you I count
blissful climaxes: seven times seven!


Submitted on 2005-04-10 13:20:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "Your body suffocates my thoughts " A nice image here. I insist on hard imagery so this type of etherical thought is hard for me to express. I thought that line specifically was well done."
As my head rubs against you I count
blissful endings: seven times seven!"
Ok, since this piece is obviously directional. I'm not in a position to totally understand the last three words. However as an outside observer the tie in, doesn't work for me. To be more clear, as its the title of the piece. I wish there was a dual meaning to the those three words. I don't necessarily have to understand what you intend the subject to get, but it'd be tighter if it worked on another level as well. Keep it up. Of course, if we're talking about 49 climaxes on a personal level can i just say kudos.
| Posted on 2005-04-10 00:00:00 | by harley3k | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting...*tryin to feel it*. Not the best poem I've ever read...or the second best...or third...etc. but it definately wasn't bad. I like the Masochistic feel to it...however..I don't totally understand the peice. which is fine...cuz that was probably the point..anyway. Good work.
| Posted on 2005-04-10 00:00:00 | by Samuel Bielz | [ Reply to This ]

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