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My Mirror- complete

Author: Voodoo_Lounge
ASL Info:    21/F/OH
Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 408 /588 /171
Words: 48
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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My Mirror- complete

Like a mirror
Deep, eternal,
Honest and clear....
Drown in me
And everything
I allow you to be.
Eager to please,
Willing, wanton-
Bowing on my knees.
A taste of sin,
Pain, beauty-
The alignment within.
In the shadow of you,
My mirror-
Perfect, flawless, true....

Submitted on 2004-04-02 22:00:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the use of the mirror to reflect on what you are and what you would become - it is a useful device in the round.
Patently and overtly erotic too, this has good balance and shows control.
It's good!
| Posted on 2004-04-03 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]
  A fair image means a foul self, go ask Dorian Grey.
Like Dorian, we all like to look fair in the eyes of others which is called high self esteem and is compulsory; while self respect is entirely voluntary.
| Posted on 2004-04-02 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]
  "Perfect, flawless and true" is reversed in the mirror and becomes imperfect, flawed and false.
Is it that the perfect is in front of the mirror or is it the imperfect in front of the mirror?
When I say, "Mirror, mirror on the wall, who is the fairest of us all?", a fair image means a foul self.
| Posted on 2004-04-02 00:00:00 | by Torie | [ Reply to This ]
  I feel a lot of passion oozing through in this writing.....The only part I don't get is the conflicting statements over who is the submissive soul in this poem. At one point it says "everything I allow you to be" and another point says "bowing on my knees" Hmmm this is quite interesting. Got me thinking....
| Posted on 2004-04-02 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]

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