I really liked it. Maybe because iknow what you're talking about... everything you write is very personal, and no one can really understand it but you. I always liked that. So many people write random junk, but everything you say is heartfelt and meaningful. Plus its just damn beautiful. And i can't do much else but compliment you. You don't need the compliments. your egos' too big already. and i mean that in THE nicest way. I don't mind you being confident.
I think the comment left by CYANIDE made NO grammatical sense whatsoever, half the sentences were total bull[censored]... I don't understand how people can be so ignorant... "you could of" v. "you could have"
and "now for the content wise" doesn't even make sense.
a nice poem... even though i cannot write like this and the genre i usually stay in is unhappy, and dark... well... this one was very veryu good... it was fun to read even though i do not know you guys enough to truely judge... it was still a wonderful read and i could still understand... it was fun... thank you for a good read
i had to concentrate hard when i was reading this because it seeme to skip around a bit. i believe there was a beautiful sentiment behind this but
[[Or is that My tongue? Carcinogenic saliva Makes it hard to breathe As radio waves Pull on the Cancer That is growing In my heart. It hurts ]]
adds a negative touch, so i wasnt quite sure where you were going with it. i percieve this as you can't stand to pull away from this girl as you kiss her because the thought of losing her consumes you. i know what that's like. i liked the subject, so with revision i think this could be great. good luck :) sophie