ok, self-hate, all too familiar subject not only for me, but nearly everyone. rather than writing what emotions are portrayed on your sleeve so to speak, try being more metaphorical. Use your words to paint the picture you see, the one so ugly you give up in the middle, why's it ugly, why are you angry? Just suggestions, be well
Uh, is this true? Are you really mad at yourself? I don't think you should be if you are. You're to pretty to be mad at yourself. Other than that I think that this poem is good. Just as long as you know that your writings can lead to great things one day. I know you think that I'm just telling you this to be nice but I'm not. If you work hard at your dreams they will come true. I'm being really and truely honest with you too. I hope that you believe me. Follow your heart and dreams will come true.