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    dots Submission Name: Listen to the Beatdots
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    Author: steph1011
    Elite Ratio:    2.42 - 34/45/25
    Words: 111
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
    Total Views: 282
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 811



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       I don't know. one of those speaking things. That happen to get written and thrown away. This just popped into my head. Tell me what you think.


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    dotsListen to the Beatdots
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    *chorus
    -verse
    *= chorus twice
    *


    *Listen to the beat
    I will always keep
    all the promises I said
    till the very end.
    Wondering what will--

    saying all the vows
    all the cracking jokes
    Listen to the beat.

    -To the heart of yours
    painless needs to say
    underaged disguised
    weakened and brittle
    cannot fall
    cause sooner
    you heart will just
    collapse.

    *

    -All the roads and pathways
    to the beauty of the soul
    keeps the balance of what it took
    keep it sacred
    say it loudly
    spread it wisely
    listen to the beat
    only follow what happens to be
    real.

    *
    *




    Submitted on 2005-04-11 15:28:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was alright. I found some places were a little forced and choppy. You might want to look over this a bit.

    But I love the message you tried to prove.
    stephanie
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]



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