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    dots Submission Name: Mary Alicedots
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    Author: greensnake
    ASL Info:    60/female/ N.C.
    Elite Ratio:    4.17 - 770/691/75
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is for my cousin Mary Alice who was the kindest and most loving human being that I ever knew. No one ever came to her in need and left empty handed or empty hearted. She lived a hard and marginal life and died too young. The world is certainly poorer without her.


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    dotsMary Alicedots
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    Did you hear that Mary Alice died?
    No, well I'm not surprised.
    She wasn't rich or famous
    So the media did not pick it up.

    Yes, I heard that global warming ceased.
    No, I'm not surprised.
    The world is a much colder place
    Since Mary Alice died.




    Submitted on 2005-04-11 16:31:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! This is a powerfully emotional piece in an unconventionally passive way. You can hear the cinicism and the tears in your words and the images shared are brilliant. nice one!
    | Posted on 2005-05-30 00:00:00 | by cainboy | [ Reply to This ]
      Very nice tribute. Can't think of anything else to say, except offer my sympathies on your loss. I know she's in a wonderful place now; but of course that doesn't help you miss her any less...

    Peace,

    Joey
    | Posted on 2005-05-18 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      oh, that was beautiful. so nice that you have remembered her in verse. short, like her life, but rich and full of meaning, like her. your journal entry about the going to the beach reminds me of when I lived on the coast in VA, which I miss terribly. I don't really like OH. it's where my husband is from, which is how I got here, but would much rather be near the ocean as I lived on the east coast most of my life, either in MA or VA. maybe I will get back there someday. bless Mary Alice and you too, for writing that wonderful poem for her.
    | Posted on 2005-05-17 00:00:00 | by sierramuse8 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hi Lynn, Warm, kind, loving people must run in your family and your poem has attracted comments by your friends, moths to your candle. Sometimes we poets have to be speakers for the dead. Your poem speaks volumes for her. Love, Arthur
    | Posted on 2005-05-04 00:00:00 | by hanuman | [ Reply to This ]
      Awww, this is so sweet. What a great concept to compare her leaving to the end of global warming.
    And there are those we know as extraordinary human beings that the media never celebrates. Sandburg has a recent poem about this very idea. The exact title escapes me, but I'm sure you would like it. I'm so sorry for your loss, but I'll think your memories of her will soon be very pleasant. Great job.
    peace and love,
    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-04-23 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Always a tragedy to loose someone you love. As far as the rich and famous go I think a lot of the time the press go way to far overboard covering their story.
    This is a nice little tribute to your cousin and I am sorry to hear of your loss.
    !Doc`
    | Posted on 2005-04-18 00:00:00 | by dr_tigger | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very straightforward and plaintive in its honesty. I think what I liked about it was that even though I didn't know her, -I can think of others who I do know, that this same sentiment could apply to.

    There are so many very ordinary people we meet in life, and for those who know and love them, their passing is of far more impact than that of the famous people publicized by the media.

    I also liked how you attributed a global event to her passing, -it reminds that that we are all part of the same web.

    Good One,
    Silver
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I guess with poetry it is a kind of competition to fit in as much of the world as possible with the minimum amount of words. I guess it is difficult for us to resolve all the dualities of our lives but the association of kind people is certainly helpful. And when death, the ultimate duality that takes away from us all equally (rich, poor, famous, unknown -doesn't matter), takes them away we are left in turbulence. Your poem tells of your loss, even if the rest of the world cannot appreciate it.
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by kanu | [ Reply to This ]
      Now this eulogy proofs that much can be said fantastically in a few words...I see you hurting from this lost and send my condolences and the sentiment Mary had so much warmth that her leaving would make "Yes, I heard that global warming ceased" still giving in death. Nice piece here. `always poetry, cheryl.
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      short and wonderful... this poem is a wonderful wonderful great great poem... and i hate the media... i sensed kind of a hostility twords the media... i agree with that also... i ahte the media... this poem is a very wonderful poem even though it is short... it still gets across the point and it also gets across the emotion... it is a very concentrated and emotional... it works in every way... thank you for such a wonderful read
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Esophagus1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Very simple, and very straightforward, but very sweet. It sent chills down me and made me sad for a moment... I like the way you kept it short, and not weepy. Very fitting tribute.
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by deepinthought | [ Reply to This ]
      There is something about this poem that I really, really like. Perhaps it is the simplicity, which at a first glimpse can seem all too obvious. But really, what I draw from it is almost haunting. I like stuff like this.
    Right on.

    LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
      aww...this is sweet...i am so sorry for you loss...everyday wonderful people die...its like a bright star dying and the light around the world growing darker everytime of the few people on this planet who deserve life die...keep writing and remembering your loved one.

    rHAINe
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Very well done. No need to explain who she was or what she did. The mere fact that you wrote about her says it all.
    Wonderful.
    Carol
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by wannabe1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Short and interesting piece - I liked the global warming lines. You should do one that really explains why you felt that way about her; what she did, etc. Thanks for sharing! Love, Peace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I havenít really anything to add to the comments youíve already had. Just wish Iíd seen it first so I could say something more original than Wow! love the way you juxtapose global warming with your loss. There is every kind of emotion in this - love, bitterness, sorrow. The more I read it the more striking it is. An incredible write and a very touching tribute to your cousin.
    Keep in touch, love and peace
    Comradenessie.
    | Posted on 2005-06-16 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]


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