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    dots Submission Name: ..:::Untilted:::..dots
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    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Your shameless games and your worthless ways get you nowhere in life.
    Remember, you chose to go that path. You chose to make those decisions, right or wrong.
    How can I help someone that does not wish to be helped?
    How can I sit here and give you advice when my words are going in one ear and out of the other?
    Take control of your own life and pay attention to the signs that are telling you, you are headed in the wrong direction.
    You will understand more about the way of life as you mature, mentally. When you get there, let me know.

    Time and time again I tell you to listen to what people say because one day you will need it.
    When you're on top of the world, id doesnt seem so big.
    Thats why you come down every now and then so you can stay level headed.
    Without friends and a life where are you?
    Who are you?
    Nobody.
    Remember that when you call me for help.




    Submitted on 2005-04-11 18:50:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this as well. It remindes me of something that I would say to my x because she needs to stop what she's doing, look around her life and realize who really loves her and who cares or is always there for her. She don't realize that when you burn a bridge you can't cross back over it again and your friends are the first most important things in your life.

    Good work, I'd tell you to keep it up but I know you will.
    | Posted on 2005-06-02 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      This is something that I can definately relate to.. It feels like something I might say to my younger sister, as she is at this time not making the best decisions with her life..
    The emotion is beautiful and very moving, which i like.. It's also not spoon fed to the reader, but put out there plainly for them to pick up and examine on their own..
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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