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    dots Submission Name: Another Onedots

    Author: PookiezBookie
    ASL Info:    16/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    4.4 - 103/129/49
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsAnother Onedots

    I'm tired of living these lies of yours.
    They're not even mine to hold and yet I keep paying the price.
    My name has been put to shame because your truth has become misguided.
    How can you be so shallow?
    To look someone in the eyes knowing that all that lies behind the blurry of words, is a hatred towards right and what IS right.
    Guide your anger with passion, not mistakes.
    For that is what leads you into the world beyond all worlds.
    Where life is no longer a priviledge it is a necessity.
    Enjoy your time in Paradise while the rest of us are here in shiny,hot Sunnydale, waiting for you to come around.

    Submitted on 2005-04-11 18:54:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yha I feel ya on this, perdy good write here and hella true point you give. well you have been hideing or something. I have;nt heard from you in a while.
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by jermwerm | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful piece.. First, my favourite line would be the seventh..

    "Guide your anger with passion, not mistakes."

    It is so incredibly true that I sighed and nodded my head when I read it..
    The feeling and emotion given off by this is well written out, and does not feel spoon fed.. I felt I was able to examine each word and line for myself and pull out of it what I wanted, rather than exactly what you wanted, which makes it that much more pleasant to read..
    Wonderful job..
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]
      First of all I like the overall feeling that this poem gives off, and the message that I recieve from it; that of someone living in their own world oblivious to all that goes on around them, is something that intrigues my for I see it every day. People too COOL to be anything but. And I feel that these lies are told to that person by him/herself but they affect others in a negative way. The only thing that bothers me is the last line because in life people likes these often aren't waited for. Many people like this are just left behind to live in their own little world because others simply don't care. Other than that I really like this poem.
    What part of Arizona are you from? I live here too.
    I would like it if you responded to my post and thank you for the thought provoking read.
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by ConScribe | [ Reply to This ]

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