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    dots Submission Name: Hollywood Dream?dots
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    Author: ConScribe
    ASL Info:    19/M/Tucson,AZ
    Elite Ratio:    5.11 - 262/360/143
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 598
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    Description:
       Television today has tainted our society but we are as a whole unaware of it for it is pleasant to the emotions that play in our hearts. We love Hollywood almost too much and so many people have become slaves to all the evils that it truly stands for.


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    dotsHollywood Dream?dots
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    Only now is all they know
    About God and their creation,
    About their lives, about their loves,
    Bought from a Hollywood station.
    And when eMpTyV is all they see
    It stuns imagination.
    And all they see to be unique
    Is only just the same
    For children growing up to be
    Wishers of the fame.
    T.V. taught them it is grand
    To be so high in stature
    To play Miss Fame at her game
    And try so hard to match her.
    For now beliefs are pushed so hard
    By every silver screen
    Taking all false hope and want
    To render it routine.




    Submitted on 2005-04-11 19:44:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is good. a subject touched upon so much that i was really expecting this to totally blow when i read the description. but the style and sublte yet screaming satirical voice in this make this truely shine as a piece. very good. this is definately a fave.

    it's good to see talent at a young age. most 17 year old writers are writing about how depressed they are and blah blah who cares. (no offense to them) but you seem to have artistical ambition which is the distinction between someone who writes and someone who is a writer. i genually enjot this!!!!
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Skillessbasterd | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely beautiful, and so totally true.. The images that you conveyed through this are so true about life today, and how we perceive fame.. It is sad that our lives, and the lives of our children are so governed by what we see on the television..
    I think my favourite part is lines 11 - 14..

    "T.V. taught them it is grand
    To be so high in stature
    To play Miss Fame at her game
    And try so hard to match her."

    These lines really show just how much we all want to be just like that famous woman or man that we so idolize..
    Beautiful work..
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]


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