This was really sweet, and right on the money. Technically it is a form of haiku called senyru, which follows the form, but needn't be about nature or seasons, and can be humorous, satirical or about any number of things. Here you perfectly grasp the sudden change in perspective when a daughter-becomes a mother. I loved this to pieces, -wish you had written it about 12 years ago, lol before any of my 3 daughters became :First time Mamas" Good One Silver
I felt exactly this way with my first born and wouldn't let other's hold hima and I was 22 lol and he was all mine all mine cause I carried him and borned him lol so childish I was @ 22. But it was awesome as I am sure your babe is to you also and yes that babe is really yours lol! `always poetry, Cheryl
hmm... i cannot relate but i found it pretty funny and sounded like a fun one to write... it was pretty happy and fun... yes... mheh... i cannot offer you any suggestions because i am not very good at happy poems... sorry... but i liked it.. thank you for a nice read
Being a mum defintiely has more pluses than minuses as long as you lay down good ground rules and stick to them. How about "have a large taste of tenderness" as in tenderness being meat and tenderness being pain, for the bee?? Just a thought lol.