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    dots Submission Name: First Time Mama - A Haikudots
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    Author: elephantasia
    ASL Info:    37/F/UK
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 398/490/159
    Words: 14
    Class/Type: Haiku/Comedy
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       Just for fun lol. First borns are overwhelming


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    dotsFirst Time Mama - A Haikudots
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    I am a mama?
    A mama? Am I? I am!
    Oh Mama Mia!




    Submitted on 2005-04-11 19:52:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Confusing, in kind of way Dr. Seuss way, but itís entertainingly cut. It sounds like a child describing how she thinks mother hood would feel like.
    | Posted on 2005-05-11 00:00:00 | by Cloud_lion | [ Reply to This ]
      Cute. It made me laugh. Anyone who doesn't like this, or laugh at it, try saying it ten times really fast! Great one, ladyngold!
    | Posted on 2005-04-14 00:00:00 | by Areinaka | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really sweet, and right on the money. Technically it is a form of haiku called senyru, which follows the form, but needn't be about nature or seasons, and can be humorous, satirical or about any number of things. Here you perfectly grasp the sudden change in perspective when a daughter-becomes a mother. I loved this to pieces, -wish you had written it about 12 years ago, lol before any of my 3 daughters became :First time Mamas"
    Good One
    Silver
    | Posted on 2005-04-13 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      I felt exactly this way with my first born and wouldn't let other's hold hima and I was 22 lol and he was all mine all mine cause I carried him and borned him lol so childish I was @ 22. But it was awesome as I am sure your babe is to you also and yes that babe is really yours lol! `always poetry, Cheryl
    | Posted on 2005-04-12 00:00:00 | by ladyngold | [ Reply to This ]
      Hahahaha! I ain't never seen a funny haiku before! Good on you for stepping outside the circle, and very clever wordplay.
    Five Stars!
    Be Happy
    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      hmm... i cannot relate but i found it pretty funny and sounded like a fun one to write... it was pretty happy and fun... yes... mheh... i cannot offer you any suggestions because i am not very good at happy poems... sorry... but i liked it.. thank you for a nice read
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by Esophagus1 | [ Reply to This ]
      Being a mum defintiely has more pluses than minuses as long as you lay down good ground rules and stick to them. How about "have a large taste of tenderness" as in tenderness being meat and tenderness being pain, for the bee?? Just a thought lol.

    Thanks for calling my poem cute! xoxoxo
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by elephantasia | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty cute. It reminds me of what you'd say after taking a pregnancy test or something. I like the repetition in this. I imagine being a mum is hard, but I know it has a lot of rewards too.
    | Posted on 2005-04-11 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]


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