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    dots Submission Name: My Family Treedots
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    Author: brassmonkey2009
    ASL Info:    16/f/nowhere
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 82/72/36
    Words: 282
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Pardon this if you think it's one of those "bash your family" things. It's just, one half of my family managed to be filled with hate and they don't know how to love. My friends became my family after a long time of waiting for something that just wasn't there. They filled up that gap. Perhaps, you may think this is mean or something, but live in my family and you would get it. I have a poem about my Father and whatnot. Just read if you choose.


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    dotsMy Family Treedots
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    "What grows on your family tree?"
    a friend of mine- my real family asked me
    Eyes glaring down, I knew not what to say
    words lacked, thoughts raced
    mouth open- no words fell out
    "Don't go through if it hurts too much."
    my reason for breathing consoled
    hand raised to cover their words,
    a current of tears filled inside, but the dam
    of the past built a block over any expression
    - Over what made me human

    I spoke

    "The tree bears nothing good to be reaped.
    the tree deceives you with temptation
    consumes you
    slowly callouses and makes the inside barren.
    The roots are too strong to be pulled up
    to stop all this mess.
    It feeds off of pain so it can't ever end."
    was spoken with a heart of lament
    "Love is a meaningless word, it holds no value.
    Branches of hate, branches of greed
    produce all they can. They kill you slowly."
    fell out choked.

    "Don't come too close to its' sironous look,
    It only bears bitter fruit.
    Darkness, only darkness.
    There is no thing of beauty in this tree.
    The fruit is poison, stay far away.
    I am of the tree- stay nowhere near.
    I never want you to see what I have."
    my voice quivered out.
    Expecting my friend- the only thing I love
    to leave me like all others, my eyes went vacant
    But then, a loving touch embraced me
    the only one I've ever known took me in
    "You. You are wrong. The tree beared you.
    You came out of the dust and darkness and are light"
    At that second I knew.
    I did have a family- a reason.




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